Beto the adventurous in Antarctica.
Please dear reader, help me using expressions to exaggerate my story, I would greatly appreciate it.
Have I ever told you about the time when I was exploring Antarctica?
It all started when I was sent to take pictures of animals that live in Antarctica. To begin with my story I remember that I was a tiny ( microscopic) fishing boat and I was in seventh heaven because the members of the exploration were telling hilarious jokes. The sea was calm when we left the harbor and the boat was crowded (packed) as a caned sardines then I was mind blowing when I gazed the Penguins Rockhopper appear out of nowhere so I bursted into tears it took my breath away. Suddenly the sky turned black like a perfect storm and later to my horror a gigantic mega monster galcier was approaching to our boat and eventually a storm blew up I was scared stiff because the boat's engine broke down moreover the worst thing was we noticed there were no lifejackets or radio in the fishing boat although I was at the end of my rope I had run out of hope, patience and energy and dying for a drink and in my last legs I never lost hope even that I was at death's door. The waves were colossal and we thought we were going to die, I was going out of my mind It turned out that suddenly the engine started to work again. In the end I cried and then I fainted. when I recover consciousness we were safe and sound and everyone happy eating delicious fish soup.
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Beto the adventurous in Antarctica.
Please dear reader, help me using expressions to exaggerate my story, I would greatly appreciate it.Have I ever told you about the time when I was exploring Antarctica?
It all started when I was sent to take pictures of animals that live in Antarctica. To begin with my story I remember that I was in a tiny ( microscopic ) fishing boat and I was in seventh heaven *stitches because the members of the exploration were telling hilarious jokes. The sea was calm when we left the harbor and the boat was crowded packed as a caned sardines. then I was mind blowing when I gazed the Penguins Rockhopper appear out of nowhere so I bursted into tears it took my breath away. Then out of nowhere a group of rock hopper penguins appeared, taking my breath away and reducing me to tears. Suddenly the sky turned pitch black like a perfect storm and later to my horror a gigantic mega monster glacier was approaching to bearing down on our boat. and eventually a To make matters worse, a storm blew up I was scared stiff because the just as the boat's engine broke down. Needless to say I was scared stiff! moreover the worst thing was Just when we thought that things could not get worse, we noticed there were no lifejackets or radio in the fishing boat. although I was at the end of my rope and had run out of hope, patience and energy, and I was absolutely dying for a drink. Even though I felt that I was at death's door, I never lost hope. The waves were colossal and when we finally thought we were going to die, I was going out of my mind It turned out that the engine suddenly started to work again. In the end I cried wept tears of joy and then I fainted. When I recovered consciousness, we were safe and sound and everyone was happily eating delicious fish soup.
Good work! Great story. Be careful with the run-on sentences!
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