Essay on Fast Food Bar Chart
I have written 222 words. I think this is a bit too much for a short essay (at least 150 words).
Could you help me to correct and see where I can cut off? Thank you!
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The bar chart compares how often American dined at fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.
It is clear that the frequency of eating fast food in the USA tend to be fairly similar over the 10-year period.
While the majority of Americans consumed fast food once a week in 2003 and 2006, they ate less often in 2013, just once or twice a month.
In 2003, around 31% of people in the USA ate out at fast food restaurants once a week, and this figure peaked in 2006, at about 33%.
By contrast, the percentage of American who consumed fast food once or twice a month was 30% in 2003, but saw a sharp drop of 5% by 2006.
Over the following 7 years, the figure for people who went to fast food restaurants weekly dropped considerably by approximately 5%, while those for going once or twice a month rose dramatically to just under 35%.
The figure for Americans dining at fast food restaurants several times a week remained above 15% in each year, peaking at 20% in 2006.
At the same time, the proportion of people in the USA eating fast food stayed below 15 %.
The proportion of Americans who never went to fast food restaurants was slightly higher than those going daily, at around 5%.
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Essay on Fast Food Bar Chart
I have written 222 words. I think this is a bit too much for a short essay (at least 150 words).Could you help me to correct and see where I can cut off? Thank you!
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The bar chart compares how often Americans dined at fast food restaurants in the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.
It is clear that the frequency of eating fast food in the USA tended to be fairly similar over the 10-year period.
While the largest group* of Americans consumed fast food once a week in 2003 and 2006, they ate it less often in 2013, just once or twice a month.
In 2003, around 31% of people in the USA ate out at fast food restaurants once a week, and this figure peaked in 2006 for the years shown**, at about 33%. By contrast, the percentage of Americans who consumed fast food once or twice a month was 30% in 2003, but saw a sharp drop of 5% by 2006. Over the following 7 years, the figure for people who went to fast food restaurants weekly dropped considerably by approximately 5%, while those for going once or twice a month rose dramatically to just under 35%.
The figure for Americans dining at fast food restaurants several times a week remained above 15% in each year, peaking at 20% in 2006 for the given data*. At the same time, the proportion of people in the USA eating fast food only a few times a year stayed at or below 15 %.
The proportion of Americans who never went to fast food restaurants was slightly higher than those going daily, at around 5%.
[* Every value in the chart is less than 50%, so you cannot call any one group "a majority" which means over 50%.
** Remember that the chart does not give every year of the 10 year span, so when you mention peaks in 2006 you can't assume that was the year the peaks actually occurred. For example, the peaks could have occurred one or two years before or several years after 2006.
Your choice of graph data to contrast is good. Sorry, but I don't see any good way of making your essay shorter.]
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