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Writing - An essay In your English class, you have been talking about role models. Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay. Write an essay using all the notes and give reasons for your point of view. Write your essay in 140-190 words. Essay questions: Is it better for young people to decide for themselves how to live, rather than following the example of a role model? Notes: Things to write about. 1. The influence of role models. 2. Individuality. 3. Your own idea. Nowadays, more and more people are influenced by role models, the main cause is the influence of the social media such as Facebook, Twitter in comparison with some years ago that the role models were the family or a close circle of friends and is less the number of people that are creating their own individuality or affected by someone. Role models can be all kind of people like celebrities, football players or politicians. They can motivate young people to decide what they want to do for example, what to study or dedicate. However, sometimes this influence or effect not produce a positive effect and can affect the lives of the people. On the other hand, there are some teenagers trying to create their own individuality with all of these aspects. The main reason is they do not want to copy and make mistakes, they want to do things by themselves and experiment. In my opinion, there must be a balance between their individuality and good things that they can copy from role models in order to have a better life and why not consider in the future that they can be a role model.

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Writing - An essay

In your English class, you have been talking about role models.
Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay.

Write an essay using all the notes and give reasons for your point of view. Write your
essay in 140-190 words.

Essay questions: Is it better for young people to decide for themselves how to live, rather than following the example of a role model?

Notes: Things to write about.
1. The influence of role models.
2. Individuality.
3. Your own idea.

Nowadays, more and more people are influenced by role models, the main cause is the influence of the social media such as Facebook and Twitter in comparison with some years ago when that the role models were the family or a close circle of friends and is less the number of people that are creating their own individuality or affected by someone (1).

Role models can be all kind of people like celebrities, football players or politicians. They can motivate young people to decide what they want to do for example, what to study or what to dedicate themselves to. However, sometimes this influence or effect does  not produce a positive effect and can affect the lives of the people.

On the other hand, there are some teenagers trying to create their own individuality with all of these aspects. The main reason is that they do not want to copy and make mistakes, they want to do things by themselves and experiment.

In my opinion, there must be a balance between their individuality and good things that they can copy from role models in order to have a better life and why not consider in the future that they can be a role model.

(1)  This sentence is awkward. I do not know what you are trying to say.


Well written. Very good!


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