My village's train station is going to be closed in the name of efficiency and economy
Dear Sir/ Madame,
I am writing to express my concern about your decission of closing the train station in my village.
Firstly, I must admit that I have personal and selfish motifs to ask you to re-think about this issue.
As I see it, not only does this station allow us to move easily but it also involves a high percentage of tourists that if it wasn't for it, they would never come here.
Nevertheless, I understand that a company is not a charity and profits are totally neccesary as well as being up to date as far as efficiency is concerned.
Therefore, I am convinced that The Government is likely to support companies which boost the use of the public transport.
Despite being in crisis time, I can affirm that if you ask, you will be given a loan or any type of help.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that if you decided to increase the ticket prices we would still taking the train as it would continue being cheaper than usig our cars.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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Our village train station will be closed to make economies.
Dear Sir/ Madam,I am writing to express my concern about your decision to close the train station in our village.
Firstly, I must admit to a personal interest in this issue.
As I see it, not only does this station allow us to move easily, it also allows many tourists to visit, who would not otherwise come.
Nevertheless, I understand that a company is not a charity and profits are totally neccesary as well as being up to date as far as efficiency is concerned.
Therefore, I am convinced that The Government is likely to support companies who encourage public transport.
Although there is a crisis, I can affirm that if you ask, you will be given a loan or any type of help.
On the other hand, I strongly believe that if you decide to increase ticket prices we would take the train as it would still be cheaper than driving.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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My village's train station is going to be closed for the sake of efficiency and cost-effectiveness
Dear Sir/ Madam,I am writing to express my concern about your decision to close the train station in my village.
Firstly, I must admit that I have personal [ I believe "selfish" does not suit it] reasons to ask you to reconsider the issue.
As I see it, not only does the station allow us to move easily, as well as it grants access to a high percentage of tourists, who would never come here otherwise.
Nevertheless, I understand that a company is not a charity enterprise, and profits are totally necessary, as well as being up to date as far as efficiency is concerned.
[I would rewrite it as a concession: Even though I understand that a company must profit, rather than do charity, as well as being up to date with efficiency, I am convinced that...]
I am quite convinced that The Government is very liikely to support companies which boost the use of the public transport.
Despite the fact that we are undergoing an economic crisis, I would suggest you to ask for a loan or another related type of help, and I am quite sure that you would get it [ it sounds more diplomatic like this]..
Another suggestion would be raising the ticket's prices. I am definitely sure that we would still be taking the train, as it would continue to be cheaper than using cars. [Again, I ask you to reconsider the decision carefully, as it would affect many peoples lives negatively, as I tried to convey above].
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
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