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Hi guys, I have an English exam, can you help me to correct the text? There have always been stereotypes in order to describe women and men. For example, the women are always seen as emotional, overthinking, talkative, nuisance etc. to the men’s eyes, while men are always seen as messy, lazy, ‘one-syllable-talking’ etc. to the women’s eyes. However, did these stereotypes exist still now? Nowadays, we live in an upside down world where the roles are mixed and not strict anymore, so you can see women behaving like a men and vice versa. For example, there are a lot of men that use skin creams to keep hydrated, shave their body and wear funny clothes; they take care of themselves like women do. On the contrary, there are a lot of women that offer a dinner to a man, wear “not feminine” clothes and that behave in a non-compliance manner. From my point of view, the roles that the society has always imposed us, are useless and people are to understand this. These are only stereotypes, that have nothing to do with the people’s nature. Everyone has to choose what to be and it is stupid to think that “men have to offer dinner, they mustn’t cry, they have to be strict and not emotive” etc. We all have to be free to do what we want, without being judged by others. I’m convinced that stereotypes have to remain stereotypes.

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Hi guys, I have an English exam, can you help me to correct the text?

There have always been stereotypes in order to describe women and men. For example, to men; the women are always seen as emotional, overthinking, over-analyzing, talkative, nuisance etc;. to the men’s eyes, while men are always seen to women as messy, lazy, ‘one-syllable-talking’ etc. to the women’s eyes. However, did do these stereotypes exist still now? Nowadays, we live in an upside down world where the roles are mixed and not strict anymore, so you can see women behaving like a men and vice versa. For example, there are a lot of men that use skin creams to keep hydrated, shave their body and wear funny clothes.  They take care of themselves like women do. On the contrary, there are a lot of women that offer a dinner to a man, wear “not feminine” unfeminine clothing and that behave in a non-compliant manner.
From my point of view, the roles that the society has always imposed on us, are useless and people are beginning to understand this. These are only stereotypes, that have nothing to do with the people’s nature nature of people. Everyone has to choose what to be and it is stupid to think that “men have to offer dinner, they mustn’t cry, they have to be strict and not emotive” etc. We all have to be free to do what we want, without being judged by others. I’m convinced that stereotypes have to remain stereotypes.

You may want to re-think how you are using 'etc'.   I think you use 'etc.' a bit too much.  That said, you write very well!

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I will try to leave a correction below, for some reason, it won't let me post the corrections :/
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You did a good job with minimal errors!

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