The Great Wall
Hello, today I will tell about the Great Wall . The Great Wall is 10,000 Kilometers long, and it’s more than 2000 years old .And it was the biggest wall in the whole wide world. It wasn’t built one time but more than one Time. The great wall stands a part of China. And you know who built the great wall , yes it was qin shi huang. There are some towers between the big wall. the wall reaches the top of the high mountains.
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The Great Wall
Hello. Today I will [tell you about / write about] (1) the Great Wall . The Great Wall is 10,000 kilometers long, and it’s more than 2,000 years old. It was also (2) the biggest wall in the whole wide (3) world. It wasn’t built all at once but across more than one period. The Great Wall stands a part of China. And do you know who built the Great Wall? Yes, it was Qin Shi Huang. There are some towers between sections of the wall. The wall reaches the top of the (4)high mountains.(1) tell [person] about / tell a story / tell a joke / tell a lie -- all good. However, you can't write: tell about / tell the Great Wall.
(2) Avoid using 'and' at the start of sentences. Sometimes it reads okay. Here it definitely doesn't.
(3) "whole wide world" is a good phrase for children's stories, but it sounds strange here.
(4) When you write 'the' here, it is like saying 那個高山. You can either say "the top of high mountains", or you can name the mountains. The second option is probably more interesting.
Also, I don't know what you mean by "stands a part of China". Sorry!
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