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Describe a toy you had in the childhood Like girls all around the world, I had lots of stuffed toys when I was a child. Among them, my favourite is a lovely beige teddy bear. I still remembered that I was eight years old then and was a grade two primary school student. The lovely teddy bear was given by my mother as an award for the great score I achieved in my final exam. I swear it was the softest and most lovely toys I'd ever had. Its fluffy body, glittering and round eyes, cute ears all made it unique and adorable. I called it Coco because it smelled just like chocolate which made me feel so sweet and comfortable. The size of coco was perfect to hug, so I would cuddle it when I slept every night. For me, Coco was not noly a toy, but also a good friend who accompanied me to grow up. I often shared my annoyances and secrets with her and she was always a great listener.

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Describe a Toy You Had When You Were a Child

Like most girls_around the world, I had lots of stuffed toys when I was a child. Among them, my favourite was a lovely beige teddy bear. I still remember that I was an eight-year-old grade two primary school student. My mother gave me the lovely teddy bear as an award for the great score I had achieved in my final exam. I swear it was the softest and most lovely toy I'd ever had. Its fluffy body, glittering and round eyes, cute ears all made it unique and adorable. I called it Coco because it smelled just like chocolate, which made me feel so nice and comfortable. The size of Coco was perfect to hug, so I would cuddle it when I slept every night. For me, Coco was not noly a toy, but also a good friend who accompanied me as I grew up. I often shared my annoyances and secrets with her and she was always a great listener. :)
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Describe a toy you had in the childhood

Like girls all around the world, I had lots of stuffed toys when I was a child. My favorite among them, my favourite is was a lovely beige teddy bear. I still remembered that I was eight years old then and was a primary school student in grade two primary school student. The lovely teddy bear was given to me by my mother as an award for the great score I achieved in on my final exam. I swear it was the softest and most lovely toys I'd ever had. Its fluffy body, glittering and round eyes, and cute ears all made it unique and adorable. I called it Coco because it smelled just like chocolate which made me feel so sweet and comfortable. The size of cCoco was perfect to hug, so I would cuddle with it when I slept every night. For me, Coco was not noly only a toy, but also a good friend who accompanied me to growing up. I often shared my annoyances and secrets with her and she was always a great listener.
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Hello Melanie, other people have done a good job of correcting your writing but if you are preparing for the IELTS exam, you need to be able to work from notes. I suggest a spidergram to help you get your ideas in order. Best wishes.

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