An old picture
I can see that most people don't want to write about their private life or something related on this notebook section. Personally, I like to write about my memories which impressed me so much. Whenever writing/ telling you my stories, I feel like I came back to that moment and enjoyed it. Moreover, I think you can also feel my emotions in it, can understand a little more about my life, the custom in my country.
Today, I want to share with you an old picture which was taken when I was a kid. Yesterday, my friend posted this picture on Facebook and I was so happy to see it. I don't remember how I looked like at that time. It's been a long time and my friend photographed the picture again by her phone so it looked fade. Still, I could recognize all people in the picture and myself too. I don't remember the exactly time of the picture, I guess it was taken when I was in the grade 2 or 3 of primary school. You can see 2 pretty girls at the middle whose house was the place we stood in the picture. Behind some trees, you can see an old tile roof house, that is my parents' house. We were all living near each other at that time so we spent most of time playing together. We are all mature now. Time flies so fast !
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An Old Picture
I can see that most people don't want to write about their private life or something related in this notebook section. Personally, I like to write about my memories which impressed me so much {better: which have left such a big impression on me}*. Whenever writing/telling you my stories, I feel like I came back to {or: I am reliving} that moment and enjoyed it.** Moreover, I think you can also feel my emotions in it, and can understand a little more about my life, and the customs in my country.Today, I want to share with you an old picture which was taken when I was a kid. Yesterday, my friend posted this picture on Facebook and I was so happy to see it. I don't remember how what*** I looked like at that time. It's been a long time, and my friend photographed the picture again by with her phone so it looked faded. Still, I could recognize all people in the picture and myself too. I don't remember the exactly time**** of the picture; I guess it was taken when I was in the Grade 2 or 3 of primary school. You can see 2 two pretty girls at in the middle whose house was the place where we stood in the picture. Behind some trees, you can see an old tile roof house, that is my parents' house. We were all living near each other at that time so we spent most of the time playing together. We are all mature now. Time flies so fast!
Great job!
*"Impressed so much" usually implies that there is something incredible/unbelievable. Ex: His fluency in ten languages impressed me so much."
**"Whenever" indicates a natural consequence that is always true, so you need the present tense here.
***Either "what I looked like" or "how I looked" would work.
****Either "I don't remember the exact time" or "I don't remember exactly the time" (or "I don't exactly remember the time")
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yes, unfortunately, time is running so fast!
When we are small, we always want to be an adult, but when it comes, we start to think it was a mistake.
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Hi, Heriberto. I also like reading people's notebooks.
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Hi! I think people don't like to write about themselves but on the other hand they enjoy to read about other's lifes. No doubt it's much more interesting, rigtht? (^_^)
I'm not a native speaker, but I like the way you write.
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:) wonderful to remember all this kids. Time flies so fast
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