What would you do if you won the lottery? If I won the lottery I would probably give some of the prize to my parents to thank them for all the things they have done for me. With the money left, I wou

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What would you do if you won the lottery? If I won the lottery I would probably give some of the prize to my parents to thank them for all the things they have done for me. With the money left, I would buy a house in a small in village near the mountains. I've always wanted to have a place where I could relax when I am stressed end everything seems to fall apart. However because of the high cost of the house, I would rather buy a Vespa to go around the city like Audreay Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday". last but not least i would give some of the prize to charity. My idea would be to give the money to a non- profit organisation which helps homeless people. One of my dreams would be to set up an association to prevent the violence against women and help people who have been abused. even though I know that my dreams are not likely to become true, I think that if i keep dreaming I will not cause harm to anyone.

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What would you do if you won the lottery?

If I won the lottery, I would probably give some of the prize to my parents to thank them for all the things they have done for me. With the remaining money, I would like to buy a house in a small village near the mountains. I've always wanted to have a place where I could relax when I'm stressed and everything seems to be falling apart. However, because houses are expensive, perhaps it would be better to buy a Vespa and drive around the city like Audrey Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday". Last but not least, I would give some of the prize to charity. Ideally, I would give the money to a non-profit organization that helps homeless people. One of my dreams is to establish an association that works to prevent violence against women, and help people who have been abused. Even though I know that my dreams are not likely to come true, I think that if I keep dreaming, good things will happen.

BOLD = Changes I made that keep the essence of what you are saying. The changes were made because they weren't either slightly incorrect, too stiff, or technically correct, but unused.

ORANGE = CONFUSING

The "falling apart" bit is right, but it was changed to sound more native.

The sentence where you say you would rather buy a Vespa, contradicts the previous sentence. In my correction here, I changed the Vespa sentence to what I believe you meant. This is a simple misuse of auxiliary verbiage. I believe you wanted to use: COULD .

USE COULD IF: -You have the ability to do something (NOTE: This does not necessarily mean you WANT to, rather you CAN)

-Talking about the future, or past. (In this case, it would be future.) In the past, could will be paired with 'have' as a general rule if you are affirming: ex. "We could have (could've) went to Italy!" Meaning you had the ability to do so. 'Could' is paired with 'not' if you did NOT have the ability to do something. ex. "We could not (couldn't) travel to Italy because it was too expensive!"

If you would rather change the sentence regarding the house:

With the money left, I could buy a house in a small in village near the mountains. I've always wanted to have a place where I could relax when I am stressed end everything seems to be falling apart. However because of the high cost of the house, I would rather buy a Vespa and drive around the city like Audrey Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday".

There are a couple different ways to fix that section in general, but I just went with the easiest fix. I am out of characters, so feel free to comment with any questions!

Overall: Great post. I absolutely understood everything that you were trying to convey. Keep writing, these things will come naturally to you.

P.S.: Technically, your spelling of 'organization' isn't wrong, it is just the UK spelling, whereas I am American! Good luck!

What would you do if you won the lottery?

If I won the lottery, I would probably give some of the prize to my parents to thank them for all the things they have done for me. With the money left, I would buy a house in a small village near the mountains. I've always wanted to have a place where I could relax when I am stressed end everything seems to fall apart. However, because of the high cost of the house, I would rather buy a Vespa to go around the city like Audreay Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday".
Last but not least, i would give some of the prize to charity. My idea would be to give the money to a non-profit organization which helps homeless people. One of my dreams would be to set up an association to prevent violence against women and to help people who have been abused. Even though I know that my dreams are not likely to become true, I think that if I keep dreaming, I will not cause harm to anyone.

However, because of the high cost of the house, I would rather buy a Vespa to go around the city like Audreay Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday". This is an odd sentence.

However, because of the high cost of the house, I would buy a Vespa instead of a car. Then I could go around the city like Audreay Hepburn in the film "Roman Holiday".

I am not sure I helped you much. I am not a English teacher. Good luck,

Paul

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