Could you please check my paragraphs?

[In your English class you have been talking about language learning. Now your English teacher has asked you to write an essay for homework.

Writer your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.]

Learning a foreign language is very useful for young people today.

Notes: travel, work and studies, (your own idea).

Answer:

In today’s world it’s very important to know and to be able to speak a language that is not the native language that you used to learn in your native country.

Especially for young people that it could be really useful for their future future job and to widen their culture (you could say: to expand their culture/worldview); nowadays I think that industries tried try to hire people that widely can manage many foreign languages. Knowing other languages could also be useful also for travelling: you can meet new people and have deeper friendships all around the world if you know the language of the place that you are visiting and it can also helps you to better understand the culture of the country where that you travel to.

I think it’s important to learn foreign languages while you are young because you have more time to improve it and because when you are a child you can easily learn new words and grammar. So, don't waste your time and start to studying!

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Could you please check my paragraphs?

[In your English class you have been talking about language learning. Now your English teacher has asked you to write an essay for homework.

Write your essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.]

Learning a foreign language is very useful for young people today.

Notes: travel, work and studies, (your own idea).

Answer:

In today’s world it’s very important to know and to be able to speak a language that is not your own native language that you learn in your own country.

Especially for young people this can* be really useful for their future future job and to widen their culture. Nowadays I think that industries try to hire people who know several foreign languages. Knowing other languages could be useful also for travelling: you can meet new people and have deeper friendships all around the world if you know the language of the place that you are visiting and it can also help you to better understand the culture of the country you travel in.

I think it’s important to learn a foreign language while you are young because you have more time to improve it and because when you are a child you can easily learn new words and grammar. So, don't waste your time and start to study!

*or, could..

Very well written!