June 24th

Today was a very hot day :(

It was the kind of hot where it's like melting and I was melting like ice cream !!!

(I would probably say, "It was burning hot and I was melting like ice cream.")

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blue: optional

The first correction is okay, but I wanted to give you another option.

In school in America, we are taught to avoid starting sentences with "and" or "but."  In most cases when you use these words, you will want to put it together with the sentence before.

June 24th

Today was very hot day :(

It was the hot like melting.

And, I was melting just like ice cream !!!