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Could you please correct my essay? Essay question: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in each subject. to what extent do you agree or disagree? ----------------------- Higher education is an essential step in people's lives. Many people believe that it is more important if universities accept equal number of male and female students in each subject. I do believe this opinion is flawed for a number of reasons, as will now be explained. It could be argued that this idea would not be popular among students. As many students prefer to choose the subject they want to study, because they believe some subjects are suitable for them more than other subjects. For instance, it is very common to see the majority of nurses are females, whereas the majority of civil engineers are males because this kind of work needs more physical activities. Therefore, the idea which calls that university should accept equal numbers of both sexes would limit their choices. Many people could also view this notion as unfair procedure. To illustrate, accepting equal numbers of both sexes in each subject would definitely affect the chances of some students to choose their preferred subject. For instance, a male student who achieved a higher score at high school could fail to join the college he wants because of the selection criteria, even if he scored more than his female peers. That explains why this idea could have many objections among students and their families. To conclude, in my view, I do believe that accepting equal number of male and female students in each subject would be unpopular among university students and could be viewed as unfair selection criteria.

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Essay question: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in each subject. to what extent do you agree or disagree? ----------------------- Higher education is an essential step in people's lives. Many people believe that it is very important that universities accept an equal number of male and female students in each subject. I do believe this opinion is flawed for a number of reasons, as will now be explained. It could be argued that this idea would not be popular among students. As many students prefer to choose the subject they want to study, because they believe some subjects are suitable for them more than other subjects. For instance, it is very common to see that the majority of nurses are females, whereas the majority of civil engineers are males because this kind of work requires more physical activities. Therefore, the idea that universities should accept an equal numbers of both sexes would limit their choices. Many people could also view this notion as an unfair procedure. To illustrate, accepting equal numbers of both sexes in each subject would definitely affect the chances of some students to choose their preferred subject. For instance, a male student who achieved a higher score at high school could fail to join the college he wants because of the selection criteria, even if he scored more than his female peers. That explains why this idea could have many objections among students and their families. To conclude, in my view, I do believe that accepting equal number of male and female students in each subject would be unpopular among university students and could be viewed as an unfair selection criteria.

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