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TOEFL writing 30min))) students should apply for admission to several schools 349 words I agree with the plan that students should apply for admission to several schools, rather than apply only to their first-choice school. It may be true that they should concentrate on only one school so that they can put full of energy for the target without distraction. On the countary, students may have to consume extra time if ther try to apply for several schools. This is because depending on the school, the requirement may vary. However, the benefits of applying to several schools outweight the ones of apply to their first-choice school. The reasons are increasing chances to enter school, and securing stability in their mental staus. First of all, students should have more chances to pass to university. In Japan, if students cannnot pass the school. they may have to study for another year. This is because normally there is only once opportunity to enter school in Japan, When I was a high school student, I applied to only first-choice school because I thought the school was the only one that I really wanted to go. However, the result was failure and I had to study one more year for anothe chance. In fact, I had a narrowd mind to choose only one school. By reseraching many schools, I found there are some suitable schools to me. If I could be back to high schoold students, I would definitely choose to apply to a couple of schools. Second of all, by applying several schools, students can have stability in thier mental status. Students may not concentrate on studies if they worried about failture of the admission. The likehood of succeding in applying will increase if they apply several. In Japan, after applying, students have about a couple months to study for the examination test such as Mathmatics and Science. With stability in mental, students will not lose their motivation to continue studying hard. Considering all of the factors above, I belive that applying to several schools are important. Students should not do the same failure for their bright future as I did in my high school days.

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First of all, students should have more chances to get into university. In Japan, if students cannot pass the school. they may have to study for another year. This is because normally there is only one opportunity to enter school in Japan, When I was a high school student, I applied to only first-choice school because I thought the school was the only one that I really wanted to go. However, the result was a failure and I had to study one more year for another chance. In fact, I had a narrowed mind to choose only one school. By researching many schools, I found there are some suitable schools for me. If I could go back to being a high school student, I would definitely choose to apply to a couple of schools.
Second of all, by applying several schools, students can have a peace of mind. Students may not concentrate on studies if they worried about failure of their admission. The likelihood of succeeding in applying will increase if they apply to several schools/institutions. In Japan, after applying, students have about a couple of months to study for the examination test such as Mathematics and Science. With a stable mental, students will not lose their motivation to continue studying hard.
Considering all of the factors above, I believe that applying to several schools is important. Students should not do the same mistake as I did in my high school days for their bright future .

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I agree with the idea that students should apply for admission to several schools, rather than applying only to their first-choice school.
It may be true that they should concentrate on only one school so that they can put all of their effort into the target without distraction. On the contrary, students may have to spend extra time if they try to apply for several schools. This is because depending on the school, the requirement may vary. However, the benefits of applying to several schools outweigh the ones of applying to their first-choice school. The reasons are to increase the chances of entering their school of choice, and to secure the stability of their mental status. (it's better to say to have a peace of mind)

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