Today's lesson #6

Today my teacher asked me who is the greatest person I've ever met. I respect my parents and teachers, of course, but these answers might be typical and boring. So this is how I replied: One of the greatest people I've ever met is my boyfriend because he can look on the bright side any time and make others happy.

For example, I went on a trip to New York with him this March. At that time, I asked him to go to a hamburger restaurant because I really wanted to eat its famous shakes. (Look at my profile picture! That's the one.) Though he doesn't really like sweet stuff, he accepted my offer as I persuaded him keenly.
I was greatly looking forward to eating it although the price was a bit expensive. However, I got disappointed after biting taking a bite of it. It was so sweet that I couldn't eat it at all. (It was by far the sweetest food I've ever eaten.)
Then, he said to me that I shouldn't be pessimistic and should think positive. He proceeded to say; "I think this is a nice opportunity because we can't eat such a crazy shake in Japan, huh. It's definitely a good experience. Have a fun!" Thanks to his remark, I could enjoy the rest of my trip. I think people like that are great.

This was really well done and it is a great story! For the part that i crossed out you could also say "after biting into it". 

Everything else was technically correct.  But just kind of some things to keep in mind. 
Your sentence: "Though he doesn't really like sweet stuff, he accepted my offer as I persuaded him keenly." This is correct. but just be aware that it's not really how people talk now...it sounds kind of older like it came out of a Jane Austin book or something.

Also you picked something a little difficult because  shakes are generally considered a drink. So I think most people would normally talk about drinking a shake not eating one. But that shake does look really thick and is that cake on it? So I'm sure you did eat it. Just be aware if you were saying that to person and they didn't see the shake they may question it. 

Does that make sense?

it is  a really nice story though! 

Today's lesson #6

Today my teacher asked me who is the greatest person I've ever met. I respect my parents and teachers, of course, but these answers might be typical and boring. So I replied to his answer like this: One of the greatest people I've ever met is my boyfriend.
There is an episode about him. I went on a trip to New York with him this March. At that time, we went to a popular hamburger restaurant that is famous for its crazy shakes. (Look at my profile picture! That's the one.) To be honest, it was by far the sweetest food I've ever eaten and I couldn't eat at all, though it was a bit expensive. I got disappointed somewhat. However, he said, "Hey! Have a fun! This is definitely a nice opportunity that we can't experience in Japan! " Thanks to his remark, I could enjoy the rest of my trip. I think that people who can look on the bright side any time and make others happy are great.

* I omitted some details because my sentences would be too long if I wrote it. Thus you might not think he is so great, but he is a pleasant person indeed.


For the "There is an episode about him" part I understand what you mean. What Niqo said is right but still feels a little clumsy. I would probably just recommend say. "For example"  Or bringing part of your conclusion up to the top so "He is the type  that can look on the bright side of anything and make others happy. For example: "  then tell the store. Then end with "And I think people like that are great"

You don't have to do that. It's not wrong if you don't. but may make it flow a little better. does that make sense?  

Today's lesson #6

Today my teacher asked me who the greatest person I've ever met is. I respect my parents and teachers, of course, but these answers might be typical and boring. So this is how I replied: One of the greatest people I've ever met is my boyfriend.
I have a story about him.* I went on a trip to New York with him this March. At that time, we went to a popular hamburger restaurant that is famous for its crazy shakes. (Look at my profile picture! That's the one.) To be honest, it was by far the sweetest food I've ever eaten and I wanted to eat more, but it was too expensive. I got somewhat disappointed. However, he said, "Hey! Just have fun! This is definitely a nice opportunity that we can't experience in Japan!" Thanks to his remark, I could enjoy the rest of my trip. I think that people who can look on the bright side at any time and make others happy are great.

* I omitted some details because my sentences would be too long if I wrote it. Thus you might not think he is so great, but he is a pleasant person indeed.

*Not sure what you meant. Tried my best to give an accurate replacement.

*Just a guess as to what you meant again