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Mexico flagDaniela Albarrán
Fashion I love fashion and buy clothes; I know, sometimes the poeple think that the clothes and fasion are superficial, but i don´tn think the same. When one choose a clothe, also choose his mood. When a person dress up, always think in the ocation or the place, por example if is a park you have to wear confortable and sport clothes, but if is a formal place you have to wear something elegant. I would really like buy all the clothes that I like, but is imposible, I'm not well-off, but i try to safe some money and I destinate for my clothes.

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Fashion

I love fashion and buy buying clothes;. I know,  that sometimes the poeeople think that the clothes and fasion are superficial, but i don´tn think so the same. When one chooses a clothes, one also chooses his  one's mood. When a person dresses up, he should always think in of the location or the place., Fpor example if is going to a park you have to wear conmfortable and sporty clothes, but if it is a formal place you have to wear something elegant.
I would really like to buy all the clothes that I like, but it is imposible., I'm not well-off, but i try to savfe some money and I destinate for my clothes.

 

NICE WORK! I understood everything and my corrections are minor. In casual conversation and most writing, we normally do not use "one" to refer to a person. It is better to use "he," "she," or "you" as you did in other sentences. If one does use "one" however, one must continue to use the same word for that sentence. 

One other change I would suggest is to use "clothing" instead of "clothes" sometimes. They are interchangeable, but clothing has a more formal ring to it and would work better when talking about dressing up.

Your word "destinate" did not make sense. Did you mean "designate"? 

 

 

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Fashion

I love fashion and buying clothes. I know that sometimes people think that clothes and fashion are superficial, but I disagree. When one chooses one's clothes, one also chooses one's mood. When we dress up, we should always think of the occassion or the place, eg., if it is a park you have to wear comfortable sports clothes, but if is a formal place you have to wear something elegant.
I would really like to buy all the clothes that I like, but that is imposible. I'm not well-off, but I try to save some money specially for my clothes.

very well written!

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I love fashion and buying clothes; I know, sometimes the poeple people think that the clothes and fashion are superficial, but i I don´tn think so the same. When one chooses an item of clothing clothe, they also choose his their mood. When a person dress up gets dressed they must always think in consider  the ocation occasion or the place they are going to.  For example, if is you are going to a park you have to wear comfortable and sport clothes, but if is a formal place you have to wear something elegant.
I would really like to buy all the clothes that I like, but is impossible; I'm not well-off, but i I try to safe save some money and I destinate for my clothes.


A good start! I don't know what you meant by "destinate" 

I've suggested "they" and "their" instead of "he" and "his" above to make the phrase gender neutral.

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