How to improve?

Christian,

I wrote two different corrected versions of your paragraph. As you know, usually there are lots of different ways to express the same ideas. There are varying degrees of formality that you can employ when communicating by email regarding business matters. The first correction below maintains a polite but more conversational/casual level of formality (this is similar in style to your original letter, only with grammar corrected). The second version is adjusted into a more formal way of writing; the difference is mainly a slight difference in tone, and in the avoiding of casual aspects of common English speech. How formal one needs to be depends a lot upon the industry you are working in, the purpose of the email, and the status of the person you are writing to. If you are writing to clients, then politeness and clarity are the main objectives.

When I am writing formally for work related purposes I typically choose much simpler sentence structures, and I write as clearly and directly as possible. More advanced vocabulary is often chosen as well, depending on the situation/audience. Avoid using contractions ('I am' instead of 'I'm', for example). If you are making a contract/agreement about money or services, then make sure someone fluent in English reads it; English has more tenses than German, and they do often convey different meanings (especially in legal/formal conversations).

Good luck mastering your English! Your initial paragraph above was quite good overall, and your meaning was absolutely clear.

Best, 

Richard

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I’m thinking about improving my written English. I need to improve because of future developments at our company. Our company is getting ready to expand, or hopefully, to spread out into Europe. So, we will be needing an English-speaking team. It’s more complicated to write business English than it is to speak in a normal way. Of course, it’s more formal. I work in the support office, and I've already had my first experience communicating with an IT service who is one of our big customers. By the way, it was a lot of fun. 

Do you have some suggestions for me?

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Hello everyone,

I am planning on improving my written English. I need to improve it for future job requirements. Our company is going to expand. More precisely, our company will be spreading out into Europe. Therefore, we need to develop an English speaking team. I find it is more complicated to write business English than to use conversational English. Of course, it is more formal. I work in the support department, and I have already had my first experience communicating with an IT service member who was working for an important English speaking client; I found this to be enjoyable.

Do you have any suggestions for me?

How to improve?