Reasons for Being Happy (IELTS writing taask 1)
The following pie charts summarise the factors why under and over 30 people feel happy.
Independently on the age, the charts feature 30% people that are mainly satisfied by their success at work. On the second place, practising hobbies is another source of glee for either the categories, representing respectively 22% and 24%. Next, 18% of under – 30 people take care of having a good appearance, whereas about the same percentage of the elder group feels glad by financial security. With a proportion of 15%, the younger group enjoys travelling, instead over – 30 people prefer being with family. Other factors, that are not explicitly mentioned, constitute 14% and 10%, respectively for the younger and the older group.
In conclusion, achievement at work and hobbies persist as the main sources of glee for any age. By contrary, appearance and travelling are factors that only appeal to young people, as the older ones are more interested in supporting the family financially and spending time with it.
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Reasons for Being Happy (IELTS writing task 1)
The following pie charts summarise the factors why under and over 30 people feel happy.Independently on the age, the charts feature 30% people that are mainly satisfied by their success at work. On the second place, practicing hobbies is another source of glee for either of the categories, representing respectively 22% and 24%. Next, 18% of under – 30 people take care of having a good appearance, whereas about the same percentage of the elder group feels glad by financial security. With a proportion of 15%, the younger group enjoys traveling, while the over – 30 people prefer being with family. Other factors, that are not explicitly mentioned, constitute 14% and 10%, respectively for the younger and the older group.
In conclusion, achievement at work and hobbies persist as the main sources of glee for any age. By contrary, appearance and traveling are factors that only appeal to young people, as the older ones are more interested in supporting the family financially and spending time with it.
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