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IELTS writing practice: task1 (Reference: https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/81/) The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.  The diagram compared the number of employee in six different sectors by sex in the republic of Freedonia between 1975 and 1995. From this chart, it can be seen that the transformation in numbers of employment by sex from these 20 years except manufacturing and public non-defense sector.  In 1975, the number of male employee in communication sector was slightly bigger than that of female employee. However, in 1995, there was a drastic increase in female workers, which reached its peak of 560,000. Similarly, as for wholesales and retail trade sector, although in 1975 the section were dominated by male with 650,000, in 1995 the number of female workers went beyond that of male workers with around 800,000. In finance/banking and public defense section, the number of female workers increased, which became close to the number of male workers between 1975 and 1995.  Accordingly, from this chart, we can see that the growth of female workers in employment from several sections from 1975 and 1995.

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IELTS writing practice: task1

(Reference: https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/81/)
The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the republic of Freedonia.
Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.


 The diagram  graphs compared the number of employees in six different sectors by sex in the republic of Freedonia between in 1975 and 1995. From this chart, it can be seen that the transformation there are changes in the numbers of people employment  employed in both by sexes from these 20 years in the 20 year period between these years in all sectors except in the manufacturing and public non-defense sectors.
 In 1975, the number of male employees in the communication sector was slightly bigger greater than that of female employees. However, in 1995, there was a drastic increase in female workers, which reached its reaching a peak of 560,000. Similarly, as for the wholesales and retail trade sector, although in 1975 the section  sector were was dominated by male employees with 650,000 males employed, in 1995 the number of female workers went beyond that of male workers with around 800,000 females employed. In the finance/banking and public defense section sectors, the number of female workers also increased, which and became close to the number of male workers between 1975 and in 1995.
 Accordingly,In summary, from this chart, we can see that the there was a growth of female workers in employment from across several sections sectors from 1975 and 1995.

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