enjoy our work

"I prefer to enjoy our work." 

This sentence lacks agreement between subject (I) and object (our work).
In English we would say "I prefer to enjoy my work" or "We prefer to enjoy our work".

Did you mean to say "I feel we should enjoy our work"? 我觉得我们应该喜欢资金的工作。

"work are still the main mean by which we provide for the children"

Here the problem is with the verb/object agreement.  Either you say "Jobs are still the means ..." or "Work is still the means ... "

In English it is best to avoid "run on sentences".  You can keep your writing fresh and clear by having just one idea per sentence: "Work is still the means to provide for our children.  And we need to provide for our parents also".

"... then, How we need to treat our work? "

You need to add "do": "But, how do we need to treat our work?".  I don't really know why, but without "do" is not correct.

"On one hand, it is better for us to choose the work that we are interested in."  This is a great sentence, especially if you stop it with a period.

"and it will be perfect if the position consist with your studying completely."

There are 3 problems here: 1)  missing a verb 2) studying is not a noun and 3) "completely" needs to come before "consistent".  May I suggest this wording:  "And it would be perfect if the position is completely consistent with our study.

"If people genuinely love their job, they will feel a great sense of accomplishment and self-expression."

Beautiful sentence.

"On the other hand, we should try to feel the joys during the work."

I love this sentence too, but instead of "the joys", you should write "joy".


"Possibly, sometimes, we choose our job[s] under some pressure, but if you keep [an] active attitude in your mind, one day, you may find that every job [is an] important experience and helpful to your future life and career. "

This sentence is run-on and has a couple mistakes, but it is still good.

"Therefore, I [think we should] enjoy our work. With this positive attitude, we will achieve not only success but also happiness. Otherwise, you can get nothing except money. "


I hope you don't mind my corrections.  Thank you for your wonderful words of wisdom. -Eric