"she"
She is the flower in the greenhouse, the ice cream in summer, a blanket in winter. She is the special existence for me. When she feel good, I feel good, she feel bad, I feel bad. She is in my next classroom, we saw each other everyday, but we seldom talked. When she talked and played with other boys, I feel terrible bad, we chatted online everyday, but at school, we seems like stranger, I wanted to talked to her at school, but I feel so shy. I hoped I can talked everything with her, we can shared all things that makes you happy or sad, and when you needs me, I can be with you all times.
She is my lover, but she doesn't know.
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So sweet that I can't stand to rewrite (from an English learner), I put past and present context :
She was the only flower in the greenhouse, an ice-cream in summer, a blanket in winter. When she felt good, I felt good. When she felt bad, I felt bad. She was from the classroom next to mine. We saw each other everyday, but we seldom talked. When she played around and talked with other boys, I felt terribly bad. We chatted online everyday, but at school we were like strangers. I really wanted to talk more to her, but I was too shy.
I am thousands miles away from home now. But I still hope one day I can talk to her about everything, share all things that make her happy or sad. When she needs me, I will be around. Ohh Michiko, you are the love of my heart, but sadly you don't know ,,,, yet.
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