Revise my text, please. CAN YOU LIVE WITHOUT COMPUTERS?
Nowadays the technology is present in our lifes, everywhere, for purchases, to make an appointment to the doctor, to work, to send letters and to make a bank transfer.
Internet and the new technologies make life easier for everyone. But also, it is a danger tool if you don´t give it the correct use. For example, when you chat with a person who you don´t know, you shouldn´t give personal information about yourself.
Personally, I use my computer to read books, to work and to chat with my friends. I can´t live without my computer!. But in the other hand, I think the technology becomes so necessary that isolates us from other people like your family.
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Revise my text, please. CAN YOU LIVE WITHOUT COMPUTERS?
Nowadays the technology is ever present in our lifes, everywhere, for purchases, to make an appointment to with the doctor, to work, to send letters and to make a bank transfer.The Internet and the new technologies make life easier for everyone, Bb also, but they are also dangerous tools [porque estás hablando sobre "the internet" y "new technologies," así que el plural suena mejor] it is a danger tool if you don´t use them correctly give it the correct use. For example, when you chat with a person who you don´t know, you shouldn´t give personal information about yourself.
Personally, I use my computer to read books, to work and to chat with my friends. I can´t live without my computer!. But ion the other hand, I think that e technology becomes so necessary that isolates us from other people like your family.
[Bien escrito Vanessa]
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Revise my text, please. CAN YOU LIVE WITH COMPUTERS?
Nowadays technology is everywhere present in our lives, for purchases, to make doctors appointments, at work, to send letters and to make bank transfers.Internet and the new technologies make life easier for everyone. But also, it is a dangerous tool if you don´t use it right. For example, when you chat with a stranger, you should say nothing about yourself.
Personally, I use my computer to read books, to work and to chat with my friends. I can´t live without my computer!. On the other hand, I think the technology becomes so clingy that it isolates us from others like our family.
very well written!
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Revise my text, please. CAN YOU LIVE WITHOUT COMPUTERS?
Nowadays, the technology is present everywhere in our lifes lives, everywhere, for from purchases, to make making an appointment to the doctor a doctor's appointment, to work, to send sending letters and to make making a bank transfer.The Internet and the new technologies make life easier for everyone. But also However, it is a danger tool if you don´t give it the correct use not used correctly. For example, when you chat with a person who you don´t know, you shouldn´t give personal information about yourself.
Personally, I use my computer to read books, to work and to chat with my friends. I can´t live without my computer!. But, in on the other hand, I think the technology becomes so necessary that can isolate us from other people like your family.
[if this is supposed to be more formal, replace "you" with either "one" or "his or her", and don't use contractions like "shouldn't" or "can't"]
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