Would someone give me a sharp criticism on this formal letter? (Exam Prep) Marcel Werner Santystreet 10 97070 Munich Mr. Greedy Principal Stingytown State School 123 Jump Street Classachussets, Alabama 5 March 2018 Dear Mr. Greedy: I am writing you concerning the spending budget of our Stingytown State School. As the head of the teacher committee at our school, it is my duty to inform you about our latest meeting. With this letter, the teacher committee and I would like to change the budget plan that you’ve announced last week immediately. The main reason for that is the devastated condition our school currently is. First of all, the boards of nearly all classrooms are about to fall off the wall. One teacher reported, that last week the chalkboard almost hit the head of a young girl, who were demonstrating her homework to the class. It is not acceptable to risk the safety of our students due to saving money for other purposes. Therefore, the committee would like to ask you to consider spending our annual budget for newer boards or even better, for interactive white boards. Recent studies have shown, that classes with such boards could improve their grades considerably, compared to classes with traditional blackboards. We could offer you to form a work group of students who are willing to compare different online sources for cost-efficient offers. Additionally, we want to ask you to raise the expenses for the side projects at our school, as well. These projects such as the art class, the school choir or the theatre group are having big issues to acquire new members. Most students complained that the equipment with which they have to work is “from the previous century” and “hideously outdated”. The students and the committee decided that these are unacceptable conditions. This circumstance appears more tragic, if one compares our facilities with the one of other schools of our town. Students reported that other schools offer the latest brushes and acryl colors, hand-made costumes and sophisticated stage settings. In conclusion, we would appreciate it if you would raise the spending budget for the above-mentioned reasons. I am sure that both the students and the teacher committee will thank you for your accommodation. Yours sincerely, Marcel