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News Article Translation Practice [JP to EN] It would be kindly appreciated if someone correct my English. NOTE: By the way, when I read this article on my iPhone after writing it on my Mac(Chrome), I found the line break function didn't seem to work properly somehow. Some notebooks written by others also seem to have the same issue as mine. If someone knows a workaround for this bug-like issue, please let me know. [Title] "Showa Retro" Atmosphere in Sightseeing Train, by Wakazakura Railways in Tottori [Body] A memorial event was held for celebrating the grand opening of the brandnew sightseeing train called "Showa" operated by the third-sector company Wakazakura Railways in eastern Tottori. About 80 people, who were mainly locals and tourists, gathered to celebrate its opening at Wakazakura Station in Wakazakura Town, Tottori Prefecture. After the ceremony, approximately 40 tourists got on the train and local residents sent them off. The train "Showa" was designed by Eiji Mitooka who was reputed for his past work on the luxurious train "Seven Stars" for JR Kyushu. His concept on this one-car train was "Showa Retro" and its body color was inspired by the vibrant blue color of a river along with its railway. In this train, box seats are equipped as well as tables so that passengers can comfortably enjoy their trip. Also wood materials are used in various parts such as its floor, window frames, and handles for hanging straps. Source: https://www3.nhk.or.jp/news/html/20180304/k10011351151000.html?utm_int=news-social_contents_list-items_002

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News Article Translation Practice [JP to EN]

It would be kindly appreciated if someone correct my English.

[Title]
"Showa Retro" Atmosphere in Sightseeing Train, by Wakazakura Railways in Tottori

[Body]
A memorial event was held for celebrating the grand opening of the brand-new sightseeing train called "Showa" operated by the third-sector company Wakazakura Railways in eastern Tottori.

About 80 people, who were mainly locals and tourists, gathered to celebrate its opening at Wakazakura Station in Wakazakura Town, Tottori Prefecture. After the ceremony, approximately 40 tourists got on the train and local residents sent them off escorted them back. (I went to check the original article. I saw the word 見送る. The exact translation of this word would be "send one off," which you used in your translation, but I think it's easier to understand if the word "escort" was used instead.)

The train "Showa" was designed by Eiji Mitooka who was reputed is known ("reputed" can be also a good word but "known" sounds more natural for this example)  for his past work on the luxurious train "Seven Stars" for JR Kyushu. His concept on this one-car train was "Showa Retro" and its body color was inspired by the vibrant blue color of a river along with its railway.

In this train, box seats are equipped as well as tables so that passengers can comfortably enjoy their trip. Also wood materials are used in various parts such as its floor, window frames, and handles for hanging straps.

Source: https://www3.nhk.or.jp/news/html/20180304/k10011351151000.html?utm_int=news-social_contents_list-items_002


There wasn't much to correct. Your translation was excellent. It was as if an actual journalist wrote it himself! 

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