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Parents should give full control over their children's diet Nowadays, The people prefer to eat the junk food especially for the children. This is bcause junk food can earn easily and taste most delicious. Same parent did not care what are their children eat and let them buying the junk food and another unheltier food. However, In my opinion, I agree that parents should give full control over their children's diet due ti most of diese caused by food and to show parents responsibility for their children To begin with, Most of children can not their desire due to their big emotional, as a result, They eat all of food which they want without thinking the effect in the future. For example, The children like to eat the sweet food such as chocolate and they eat it everyday. One year passed, They suffer the obesity caused by the food that they eat. There fore the rule of parents is most necessary for the children in controlling the food. Moreover the unheltier food affect the consetration during study. For instance, Student who eating much food can fell sleepy and lazy during the study. In short, Children with their young age cann not control their food by themselves without the help from their parents

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Parents should take full control over their children's diet

Nowadays, The people prefer to eat the junk food especially made for the children. This is bcause junk food can earn (not sure what you mean?) easily and taste most delicious. Sao=ome parents do not care what are their children eat and let them buying the junk food and another unheltier unhealthy food. However, In my opinion, I agree think that parents should give take full control over their children's diet due ti to most of diese disease caused by food and to show parents responsibility for their children.

Note:   We "take control" of our children's food.  We "give control" when we want someone else to have the control.  I might give control of the television channel to my husband if he wants to watch sports and I don't care what I watch.

There are a lot of corrections but I could understand what you are saying.  It was a good try!

In English, we use capital letters at the beginning of a sentence:  For instance, students . . .

I ran into character limits when I tried to correct the 2nd paragraph for some reason.

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