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A short story about Alison. Alison read the note, smiled, and immediately put on her coat. That note comes from her best friend who wrote to meet up in a cafe, because he just arrive from Portugal, where stayed for 3 long years. When Alison arrived, Tom wasn't there yet, so she had a hot caffee and a half of a sandwich because the weather was really cold and dark that evening. While she was chatting by her smartphone and having her coffee, a tall and thin man with a long, black and hairy coat opened the door and come into. Alison didn't recognize Tom, but he did, so sat next to her. Meanwhile, the waitress was cleaning the counter and saw the situation, so she asked Alison if she was uncomfortable, but didn't want to answer. Finally, she recognized Tom because of a little mark in his right hand and got surprised. Then she hugged him and kept a long convertation untill 9pm, when Alison's phone rang. It was her flatmate who found out the flat door opened and said to her that she hadn't dared to get in, so called to the police office.

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A short story about Alison.

Alison read the note, smiled, and immediately put on her coat. The note was from her best friend who wanted to meet in a cafe after his three year stay in Portugal. When Alison arrived, Tom hadn't so she had a hot coffee and a half a sandwich to warm her against the really cold and dark weather that evening. While she was chatting on her smartphone and having her coffee, a tall and thin man with a long, black and hairy coat opened the door and come in. Alison didn't recognize Tom, but he did, so sat next to her. 

Meanwhile, the waitress cleaning the counter saw this, and asked Alison if she was uncomfortable, but didn't want to answer. Finally, she recognized Tom because of the little mark on his right hand and was surprised. Then she hugged him and kept a long convertation until 9pm, when Alison's phone rang. It was her flatmate who had found the flat door open and said to her that she dared not go in and called the police.

very well written!

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A short story about Alison.

Alison read the note, smiled, and immediately put on her coat. That note comes came from her best friend who wrote asking to meet up in a cafe, because he had just arrived from Portugal, where he had been stayed staying for 3 long years. When Alison arrived, Tom wasn't there yet (better: hadn't arrived yet), so she had a hot caffee coffee and ate a half of a sandwich because the weather was really cold and dark that evening. While she was chatting by on her smartphone and having drinking her coffee, a tall and thin man with a long, black and hairy coat opened the door and come into the cafe. Alison didn't recognise Tom, but he did Tom recognised her, so he sat down next to her.
Meanwhile, the waitress was cleaning the counter and saw the situation, so she asked Alison if she was uncomfortable, but Alison didn't want to answer (or: know what to say). Finally, she recognised Tom because of a little mark in on his right hand and got was surprised. Then she hugged him and kept a long convertation they talked untill 9pm, when Alison's phone rang. It was her flatmate who had found out the flat door (optional: wide) open and said to her that she hadn't dared to get go in and  so had called to the police office.


Very good, your meaning come across really well. In England we spell words such as recognise with and S rather than the US spelling with a Z i.e. recognize.

Un saludo

Martyn

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