can someone check it please? it is the writing task of one toefl test. thanks
it is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends(questin)
Although many people remain close with their old friends and I still be in contact with mine, I think it is more important to make new friends. In our life we probably change city to live and we need new friends there, sometimes we change ourselves and we try to do different activities and in order to do it we need other friends, and we can also learn new things from new people. Obviously, it is important to remain in contact with your old friends, the ones you know for a long time, but we need always new people in our life.
There are a lot of reasons which push people to go to live in other cities, for working or studying or for other needs. I do not think anyone wants to be alone living far away his or her old home. Furthermore, people will look for new friends with who share their interests or hobbies. For example, I love playing football and when I went to the university in Pisa I searched and found other people with the same interest, we started play together and we became friends.
we know that some people born with some interests and die with the same. However, this do not happen for everyone. In general, people change and they change also their hobbies for different reasons. As a result, they have to make new friends with who they can share their new interests. For example, one day you could get up and you might want play tennis. Can you play it alone? I do not think so, then you will look for someone who want to play with you.
Finally, new people bring new knowledge. We should always try to meet new people in our life, we can learn a lot from them.
For all the the reasons above I believe we should try to make friends when we have the opportunity.
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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends (question)
Although many people remain close with their old friends, myself included, I still think it is more important to make new friends. In our lives we change cities, as well as grow as individuals; we try to do different activities that match our changing interests, and we need new friends in order to do this. Obviously, it is important to remain in contact with your old friends, the ones that you've known for a long time, but we will always need new people in our lives.
There are many reasons that push people to move to other cities, whether it may be work-related, school-related, or simply a personal desire. I do not think that anyone wants to necessary be alone, however, and this is why meeting new people and building new relationships is important and necessary. Furthermore, people will look for new friends with who share their interests or hobbies. For example, I love playing football and when I went to the university in Pisa I found other people with the same interest. Over time, we started playing together and became great friends.
Although it is possible for some people to maintain their same hobbies and interests through their lifetime, it is an extremely rare occurrence. In general, people change over their lifetime and so do their hobbies. As a result, they have to make new friends with whom they can share their new interests. For example, one day you could wake up and suddenly want to play tennis. Can you play it alone? I do not think so. You will need to find someone that shares this same desire as you and, naturally, friendships will form.
Finally, new people bring new knowledge. We should always try to meet new people in our life because each person carries a wealth of knowledge and personal wisdom. We can learn a lot from others, and building friendships is the best way to not only gain this knowledge, but share your own as well.
For all the the reasons previously mentioned, I believe it is more important to make new friends when given the opportunity.
**NOTES:
life vs lives
word order
In the future, try to pay extra mind to the voice of your narrative. Meaning, who is speaking? Are you taking the perspective of "I" "we" or "you"? It changes throughout the narrative, which can happen, but should have an overall continuous speaker.
Great job though and I hope this helps! Feel free to message me about any specific questions!
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