can someone check it please? it is the writing task of one toefl test, if needes I can add the text
The lecturer opposes all of the points written in the reading passage. For her the portrait know as "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet" was painted by Rembrandt, Moreover, she demonstrated why this painting is Rembrandt's work.
First, because Rembrandt was a painter who always gave a lot of attention to the details he would never paint a fur collar on a servant, who could not afford it. However, as the speaker says, there is proof that the collar was painted after by someone who wanted to increase the value of the portrait for selling it.
Second, there is some problem with the lights and shadows in the painting, Rembrandt was a master in painting them. But, the speaker asserts that the lights and shadows look unrealistic as a result of the collar added after to the portrait and by removing it we see that they will fit perfectly with the environment .
Finally, the panel of the portrait was made by different kinds of woods, he usually used only panels made by one type of wood. On the other hand, the woman in the lecture suggests that the other kind of wood panels were added after and that the real material of the painting fit with another used in one of Rembrandt's work, where probably was removed.
For these reasons the painting should be considered a Rembrandt's work.
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The lecturer opposes all of the points written in the reading passage. For her the portrait known as "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet" was painted by Rembrandt. Moreover, she demonstrated why this painting is Rembrandt's work. First, because Rembrandt was a painter who always gave a lot of attention to the details. He would never paint a fur collar on a servant who could not afford it. However, as the speaker says, there is proof that the collar was painted after by someone who wanted to increase the value of the portrait for selling it. Secondly, there are some problems with the lights and shadows in the painting. Rembrandt was a master in painting them. However, the speaker asserts that the lights and shadows look unrealistic as a result of the collar added after to the portrait; and by removing it we see that they will fit perfectly with the environment . Finally, the panel of the portrait was made by different kinds of woods, he usually used only panels made by one type of wood. On the other hand, the woman in the lecture suggests that the other kind of wood panels were added after, and that the real material of the painting fit with another used in one of Rembrandt's work that were probably removed. For these reasons the painting should be considered a work by Rembrandt.
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can someone check it please? it is the writing task of one toefl test, if needes I can add the text
The lecturer opposes all of the points written in the reading passage. For her, the portrait known as "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet", was painted by Rembrandt. Moreover, she demonstrated why this painting is Rembrandt's work.First, Rembrandt was a painter who always gave a lot of attention to details. He would have never painted a fur collar on a servant, who could not afford it. However, as the speaker says, there is proof that the collar was painted later, by someone who wanted to increase the value of the portrait for selling it.
Second, there are some problems with the lights and shadows in the painting and Rembrandt was a master in painting them. However, the speaker claims that the lights and shadows look unrealistic as a result of the collar that was added later to the portrait. In fact, by removing the collar, we can see that the shadows fit perfectly with the environment .( this part it is a bit confusing..)
Finally, the panel of the portrait was made by different kinds of wood, while Rembrandt usually used only panels made by one type of wood. On the other hand, the woman in the lecture suggests that the other types of wood panels, were also added at a later stage and that the real material of the painting, which fits with another used in one of Rembrandt's work, was probably removed.
For these reasons the painting should be considered as Rembrandt's work.
I hope you are satisfied with my corrections, it was a bit difficult to understand some parts because I haven't read the original text. Well, I wish you good luck and let me know if you need further help!
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