Computers: the most important invention of the century?
From computers invention to nowadays we are becoming more and more dependent on this innovative technology. Almost everything around us (even the most basic activities) demands the use of a computer (or a mini computer, like smartphones). For instance, to pay a bill, to talk with people around the world, to turn on appliances, to have fun playing games or reading a book, or even to watch a movie. There are so many things we can do with a computer that some people can't live without it anymore. For some, it has become the biggest discovery of the last century. I agree with this statement because I can't see a world in which people don't use computers since every little action of our daily routine is in some way connected to a computer's functionality. Although we can't say for sure that this is the most important one because there are too many important inventions in the last years that worth remembering, like the electric car, the LED light bulb, mp3 players, 3D printers, and many others. The problem is that almost all the new inventions are in some way related to a computer, which leads us to the same position we were before: the computer may be the last years' most important invention. From looking at people's lives and the needs for a computer to cover most all activities of our day life, I can conclude that there are many important discoveries in the last century and the computer is certainly one of the most important. I can't say for sure that it is the most important of all, but I know that the computer exerted a huge influence on the advanced technology we have today and this is enough to put the computer on a list of the biggest inventions of all time.
(If you would give me a score for this text from 1 to 10, what would it be?)
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Computers: the most important invention of the century?
From their invention to today we have become more and more dependent on that innovative technology, the computer. Almost everything around us, even the most basic activities, demands the use of a computer or a mini computer, like a smartphone. For instance, to pay a bill, to talk with people around the world, to turn on appliances, to have fun playing games or reading a book, or even to watch a movie. There are so many things we can do with computers that some people can no longer live without them. For them, the computer has become the biggest discovery of the last century. I share their opinion and cannot imagine a computerless world since our every little action is somehow connected to a computer's functionality. Although we can't say for sure that this is the most important invention, because so many recent inventions are worth remembering, like the electric car, the LED light bulb, mp3 players, 3D printers, and many others. The problem is that almost all the new inventions are in some way related to a computer, which leads us to the same position we were in before: the computer may be the most important invention in modern times. Looking at people's lives and the need for a computer to cover most all activities of our day life, I can conclude that there are many important discoveries in the last century and the computer is certainly one of the most important. I cannot say for sure that it is the most important, but I know that the computer hugely influenced today's advanced technology, and this is enough to put the computer on a list of the biggest inventions of all time.(If you would give me a score for this text from 1 to 10, what would it be?) 9.3
Very well written!
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Computers: the most important invention of the century?
From the invention of computers to the present we are becoming more and more dependent on this innovative technology. Almost everything around us (even the most basic activities) demands the use of a computer (or a mini computer, like smartphones). For instance, to pay a bill, to talk with people around the world, to turn on appliances, to have fun playing games or reading a book, or even to watch a movie. There are so many things we can do using a computer that some people can't live without one anymore. For some, it has become the biggest discovery of the last century. I agree with this statement because I can't see a world in which people don't use computers since every little action of our daily routine is in some way connected to a computer's functionality. However, we can't say for sure that this is the most important invention of recent years because there are too many important inventions in the last years that are worth remembering, like the electric car, the LED light bulb, mp3 players, 3D printers, and many others. The problem is that almost all the new inventions are in some way related to a computer, which leads us to the same position where we were before: the computer may be the recent years' most important invention. From looking at people's lives and their need for a computer to facilitate almost all activities of their daily life, I can conclude that, although, there are many important discoveries in the last century, and the computer is certainly one of the most important. I can't say for sure that it is the most important of all, but I know that the computer exerted a huge influence on the advanced technology we have today and this is enough to put the computer on a list of the biggest inventions of all time.(If you would give me a score for this text from 1 to 10, what would it be?)
I would score you 9/10 on this entry. You are certainly aiming for a very high standard of writing, and showing skill with complex sentence structure and advanced vocabulary.
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