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(young people enjoy life more than old people do) can anyone check my writing task please?thanks I agree with the statement written above. In my opinion, the younger enjoy their life more than the older do. Young people have more energy, more time and less responsibilities. Because of that, they can enjoy their life better than olds man do. Although there are people who think that older people can enjoy better their life because they have more money, I believe that without much energy and time the money are useless for this purpose. Teenagers and young people in general have a lot of energy to spend in different kinds of activities such as doing sports, hanging out with friends and so on. For example, a sixteen years old person can play football all the afternoon and after, in the evening, he can go to the disco without being tired. Middle age people and the older do not have that energy and they have to rest more than a younger. The time available is important to enjoy our life. In general, adults have to work all day and someone also in the nights during the week, on weekends or in their other free days they probably prefer to stay at home for resting. Young people do not have this problem, they go to school in the morning and after they can do anything, for instance. The more important reason of why I think young people enjoy life more than the older is the lack of responsibilities they have. Adults must be responsible, they have bills to pay, families to take care and other important things to think about before all. Teenagers do not have this weight to bring with them everywhere, they think only about enjoying. For these reasons I believe that the youngest age of our life are the best, younger are plenty of energy, time and they have free mind.

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(young people enjoy life more than old people) can anyone check my writing task please?thanks

I agree with the statement written above. In my opinion, youngsters enjoy life more than the elderly. Youth has more energy, more time and less responsibility, so they can enjoy their life better than old men (do)*.
Although some think that the elderly can enjoy better their life because they have more money, I believe that without much energy and time their money is useless. Teenagers and the young, in general, have lots of energy to spend on sports, hanging out with friends, and so on. For example, a sixteen-year-old can play football all afternoon and after, in the evening, he can go to the disco and still have time for marbles. The middle-aged and the elderly do not have that energy and they have to rest more than the young.
The time we have available is important to enjoy our life. In general, adults have to work all day and some also work nights during the week. On weekends or in their other free days they probably prefer to stay at home to rest. Young people do not have this problem, they go to school in the morning and afterwards they can do anything, for instance.
The most important reason why I think young people enjoy life more than the old is their few responsibilities. Adults must be responsible, they have bills to pay, families to care for and other important things to think about before all. Teenagers do not have this weight to bring with them everywhere, and think only about enjoyment.
For these reasons I believe that our youngest years are our best. The young has plenty of energy, time and they have a carefree mind.

*It is hard for me to say whether the final 'do' is needed. Rarely, or ever, is it heard in conversation, but in the exam room it may be very common. Check with your teacher.

Very well written!

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