Exercise # 10 - IELTS
Hi there! Could you check this essay, please? I haven't attached the graph at this time. Hope my writing is clear and makes sense. Thanks in advance.
The line graph illustrates changes in australian teenagers consumption of fast food between 1975 and 2000. Overall, there seems to have been a gradually increase in the amount of pizza and hamburguers consumed over time, although there was a steadily decrease in quantity of fish and chips eaten during the same period of time.
In detail, pizza and hamburguers consumption began at around five times eaten per year in 1975, but these times went up differently in the 15-years left. Thereby, the amount of pizza gradually rose to approximately 80% in 1995 and then it stayed constant from that year and onward until the end of the time frame. The quantity of hamburguers increased more quickly and strongly as that of pizza consumption until 1985, but it started to go up at a lower rate from that year to 2000. Therefore, hamburguers consumption sunged 20 times over time considerably overtaking of that of pizza consumption.
With regard to the amount of fish and chips, its behavior differed in comparison to the rest of types of fast food. Thus, starting at a figure of 100 times and then it dramatically fell to a bottom at 85% in 1980. Next, it recovered over the folllowing five years to reach a quantity of 95%, but definitely fell back to finish at around 40%. There was a considerable, but erratic decrease of this type of fat food consisting of 60% throughout 25 years.
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Exercise # 10 - IELTS
Hi there! Could you check this essay, please? I haven't attached the graph at this time. Hope my writing is clear and makes sense. Thanks in advance.The line graph illustrates changes in aAustralian teenagers' consumption of fast food between 1975 and 2000. Overall, there seems to have been a gradually increase in the amount of pizza and hamburguers consumed over time, although there was also a steadily decrease in the quantity of fish and chips eaten during the same period of time.
In detail, pizza and hamburguers consumption began at around being eaten about five times eaten per year in 1975, but these times this amount went up differently (I DON'T UNDERSTAND) in the following 15-years left. Thereby, tThe amount of pizza consumed gradually rose to by approximately 80% in to 1995 and then it stayed constant from that year and onward until the end of the time frame. The quantity of hamburguers consumed increased more quickly and strongly as than that of pizza consumption until 1985, but it started to go up at a lower rate from that year to 2000. Therefore, hamburguers consumption sunrged by 20 times over time (BETTER TO STATE FROM WHEN TO WHEN) considerably, overtaking of that of pizza consumption.
With regard to the amount of fish and chips consumed, its public behavior differed in comparison to the rest of types of fast food. Thus, it startinged at a figure of 100 times and then it dramatically fell to a bottom at 85% (OF WHAT?) in 1980. Next, it recovered over the following five years to reach a quantity of 95%, but definitely fell back to finish at around 40%. There was a considerable, but erratic decrease of this type of fast food, consisting of 60% throughout 25 years. (I DON'T UNDERSTAND THIS LAST PARAGRAPH)
This is generally well-written, but I think something was lost in translation. I don't really follow the last paragraph.
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I checked the first two paragraphs.
Exercise # 10 - IELTS
Hi there! Could you check this essay, please? I haven't attached the graph at this time. Hope my writing is clear and makes sense. Thanks in advance.The line graph illustrates changes in Australian teenagers' consumption of fast food between 1975 and 2000. Overall, there seems to have been a gradual increase in the amount of pizza and hamburgers consumed over time, although there was a steady decrease in the quantity of fish and chips eaten during the same period of time.
In detail, pizza and hamburgers were consumed about/approximately five times per year beginning in 1975, but these occurrences increased in the following 15 years. The amount of pizza consumed gradually rose to approximately 80% in 1995, and then it stayed constant from that year and onward until the end of 2000. The quantity of hamburgers increased more quickly and strongly than that of pizza consumption until 1985, but it started to go up at a lower rate from that year until 2000. Therefore, hamburger consumption increased 20 times over time considerably overtaking of that of pizza consumption.
With regard to the amount of fish and chips, its behavior differed in comparison to the rest of types of fast food. Thus, starting at a figure of 100 times and then it dramatically fell to a bottom at 85% in 1980. Next, it recovered over the folllowing five years to reach a quantity of 95%, but definitely fell back to finish at around 40%. There was a considerable, but erratic decrease of this type of fat food consisting of 60% throughout 25 years.
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