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Exercise # 8 - IELTS Hello everybody! Could someone help me with this writing checking for grammar and spelling, please? Any suggestion you would like to add or comment, feel free to do it. Thanks in advance! PS: I've attached the graph I've based my essay on. The bar chart illustrates how Gross Domestic Product (GDP) from IT and Services Industries (or Industry?) in the UK evolved along (or over?) the period between 1992 and 2000. Overall, GDP came from both IT and Service Industry steadily went up, although it was apparent that the one produced by the IT Industry did it at a greater rate in comparison to that of service industry. Looking closer to the graph, at the beginning of the period, in 1992, the IT industry component accounted for just about 6%, however, it represented 15% by the year 2000. Therefore, that GDP item experienced a twofold jump in only 8-year period. Similarly, service industry, on its side, followed a pattern very closely to that of the IT, although at lower levels of rise. Thereby, that component started representing only 4% of GDP by 1992 to finally reach just about 8% in 2000. As a result, it also displayed an increase of twice between 1992 and 2000, but at a lower degrees, in terms of percentages, compared to the IT Industry. Finally, there seem to have had a much greater gap between the two components of GDP from 1996 and onwards. While the difference between IT and service industry fell within approximately 2% between 1992 and 1996, it gradually rose from nearly 4% in 1996 and went up around 7% by 2000.

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The bar chart illustrates how Gross Domestic Product (GDP) from the IT and Services Industries in the UK evolved over the period between 1992 and 2000. Overall, GDP coming from both the IT and Service industries went up steadily, although it is apparent that the contribution of the IT Industry did so at a greater rate in comparison to that of the service industry.  Looking at the graph more closely, at the beginning of the period, in 1992, the IT industry component accounted for about 6%, however, it represented 15% by the year 2000. Therefore, that GDP item experienced a more than twofold jump in only an 8-year period. In comparison, the service industry, on its side, followed a pattern very similar to that of the IT sector, although at lower rate of increase. Specifically, this component started out representing only 4% of GDP in 1992, rising to finally reach just about 8% in 2000. As a result, it also displayed a twofold increase between 1992 and 2000., but at a lower degrees, in terms of percentages, compared to the IT Industry.  Finally, there seems to have been a much greater gap between the two components of GDP from 1996 and onwards. While the difference between the IT and service industries fell by approximately 2% between 1992 and 1996, it gradually rose from nearly 4% in 1996 and went up around 7% by 2000.


Hope this helps! Some of that is just stylistic :)

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