Eat Out
Anna and David has been going out for dinner recently. Oneday, Anna said that she gained weight of 5 kilos, which is due to those delicious food in the restaurant. Then David said she dosen't have to eat so much, the food is expensive.
After a brief consideration, Anna agreed, she said that she would cook dinner at home again, it's cheap and convenient.
Heard this decision, David turns pale, he doesn't want to eat those food Anna cooked. So he said immediately, I don't mind your weight at all, let's just eat out as usual.
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 6
1
Eating Out ("Eat Out" is an imperative, a command, probably not what you meant here)
After a brief consideration (this is perfectly fine, but not so common in casual English, more common would be "After briefly considering it..."), Anna agreed, she said that she would cook dinner at home again, it's cheap and convenient.
Hearing this decision, David turned pale, he didn't want to eat the food Anna cooked. So he said immediately said, I don't mind your weight at all, let's just eat out as usual.
0
Eat Out
Anna and David has have been going out for dinner recently. One day, Anna said that she had (be careful with reported speech - when you start a sentence with 'said/told/thought/etc.', everything goes back one tense) gained weight of 5 kilos, which is due to those delicious food dishes in the restaurant. Then David said she dosen't have to eat doesn't have to eat (obligation) OR shouldn't eat? so much, the food is expensive.After a brief consideration, Anna agreed, she said that she would cook dinner at home again, it's cheap and convenient.
Having heard ('heard' could only be used in the passive but it's a great attempt at more advanced grammar! :) ) this decision, David turns turned (you should stay consistent with the tenses throughout your writing) pale, he doesn't didn't want to eat the food Anna cooked. So he said immediately, "I don't mind your weight at all, let's just eat out as usual."
0
Great story, well-structured just be extremely careful with being consistent with the tenses. :)
0
Very well done! Watch your tenses. The story is told in the past tense but occasionally you dropped a word or sentence in that was in present tense.
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
