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Would you like to live by yourself when you work? *I practiced writing a short essay in English. Please correct me where I am wrong and tell me why it is wrong.

I would like to live by myself when I work, because I would be able to be independent of my family.

Of course, living by family would make me easier than living by myself because there are my family who helps me. However, even if I live with my family regardless of being an adult, I could not able to do anything such as cooking or making my living. If I get married someone, my husband would be surprised at me because I would not know ways to live alone. Moreover my husband would desert me.

Because of those reasons, it is necessary for me to live by myself when I work.

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Would you like to live by yourself when you work?

*I practiced writing a short essay in English. Please correct me where I am wrong and tell me why it is wrong.

I would like to live by myself when I work, because I would be able to be independent of my family.

Of course, living with  family would make things easier because there my family would help me. However, even if I live with my family regardless of being an adult, I would not be able to do anything such as cooking or making my living. If I get married to someone, my husband would be surprised because I would not know how to live alone and my husband would desert me.

Because of those reasons, it is important for me to live by myself when I work.

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