IELTS writing practice: task1
These two bar charts compared the weight measurements of people in Charlestown from in 1995 to 2015. Overall, there can be seen that the proportion of being overweight and obese have been increasing in each generation for these 60 years.
In 1955, only less 25% of people living in Charlestown had been regarded as overweight or obese and the proportions of being ideal weight or underweight were assessed by more than 70% in each generation. Especially, 20-29 aged people, who were estimated as overweight, were only 3% out of total.
However, coming into 2015, there can be seen a boost in population who are categorized as obese. Surprisingly, there are tragedy increases of being obese among those are more than 50 years old. Also, more than 40% of people are regarded as overweight or obese in generations of 30-49 years old.
Accordingly, there is a dramatical translation of the tendency regarding weight assessment of inhabitation in Charlestown through these 60 years . Most of inhabitants had kept their weight as healthy in 1955, however, in 2015 they began to weight especially this transition was significant among more than 50 aged people.
(Reference: https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/1005/)
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IELTS writing practice: task1
sThese two bar charts compared (feel free to use present in descriptions of charts and graphs) the weight measurements of people in Charlestown from in 1995 to 2015. Overall, there it can be seen that the proportion of being overweight and obese have been was increasing in each generation for these 60 years.In 1955, only less than 25% of people living in Charlestown had been regarded as overweight or obese and the proportions of being ideal weight or underweight were assessed by to be more than 70% in each generation. Especially, 20-29 aged people, who were estimated as overweight, were only 3% out of the total.
However, coming into 2015, there can be seen a boost a boost can be seen OR It can be seen that a boost took place in population who are categorized as obese. Surprisingly, there are tragedy increases of being obese among those are more than 50 years old. Also, more than 40% of people are regarded as overweight or obese in generations of 30-49 years old.
Accordingly, there is a dramatical translation of the tendency regarding weight assessment of the inhabitation in Charlestown through these 60 years . Most of inhabitants had kept their weight as healthy in 1955, however, in 2015 they began to weight (do you mean GAIN weight?) especially this transition was significant among more than 50 aged people people aged 50 or more/older.
(Reference: https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/1005/)
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IELTS writing practice: task1
These two bar charts compared the weight measurements of people in Charlestown from in 1995 to 2015. Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of being overweight and obese has been increasing in each generation for these 60 years.In 1955, only less than 25% of people living in Charlestown had been regarded as overweight or obese and the proportions of being an ideal weight or underweight were assessed by more than 70% in each generation. Especially, people aged 20-29, who were estimated as overweight, were only 3% out of the total.
However, coming into 2015, there can be seen a boost in the population who are categorized as obese. Surprisingly, there are tragedy increases of being obese among those who are over 50 years old. Also, more than 40% of people are regarded as being overweight or obese in generations of people aged 30-49.
Accordingly, there is a dramatic translation of the tendency regarding weight assessment of inhabitation in Charlestown through these 60 years. Most inhabitants had kept their weight as healthy in 1955, however, in 2015 they began to gain weight especially this transition was significant among people aged 50 and over.
(Reference: https://www.ielts-exam.net/academic_writing_samples_task_1/1005/)
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Nice work, Reiya. I've tried to highlight some of the features of your writing, take a look and in case you have any questions, feel free to bombard me with them. In general, this is a good writing, just make sure you're more careful with fixed expressions followed by a clause, or a preposition (by, as, etc.). Good luck for your exam preparation! :)
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