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Exercise # 2 - IELTS Hello, there! Could someone help me with correcting these paragraphs, please? Thanks in advance. PS: I haven't attached the line and bar charts because I don't have them at hand. The line chart exhibits the number of visitors from UK who went overseas and those abroad residents who visited UK between 1979 and 1999, whereas the bar chart displays which countries are mostly chosen by UK inhabitants in 1999. Generally speaking, what can be pointed out is that visits abroad by UK residents are considerably higher compared to those overseas people who visited the UK in the period under consideration. To begin, both visits abroad by UK residents and visits to the UK by overseas residents increased steadly from 1979 to 1999. Although the number of visitors to and from UK started at 10 millions approximately in 1979, the gap is quite significant at the end of the period, that is, in 1999. Where visits abroad by UK residents rose to over 50 millions, visits to the UK by abroad inhabitants increased just under 30 millions. In addition, France is by far the most popular country chosen by UK residents in 1999, followed by Spain and USA, at around 9 and 3 millions, respectively.

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Exercise # 2 - IELTS

Hello, there! Could someone help me with correcting these paragraphs, please? Thanks in advance. PS: I haven't attached the line and bar charts because I don't have them at hand.

The line chart exhibits ["Exhibits" is very formal. "Shows," or "displays"  is fine, but it's up to you] the number of visitors from the UK who went overseas and those foreign residents who visited the UK between 1979 and 1999, whereas the bar chart displays which countries were mostly chosen by UK inhabitants in 1999. Generally speaking, what can be pointed out is that visits abroad by UK residents were considerably higher compared to those overseas people who visited the UK in the period under consideration.

As it stands [Just a suggestion. It's not clear what "to being" is intended to mean], both visits abroad by UK residents and visits to the UK by overseas residents increased steadly from 1979 to 1999. Although the number of visitors to and from UK started at approximately 10 million in 1979, the gap has become [perfect tense] quite significant at the end of the period. That is, in 1999. Where visits abroad by UK residents rose to over 50 million, visits to the UK by abroad inhabitants ["abroad inhabitants" makes sense, but it's not really something we use in English. Suggest "Foreign Residents"]  increased to  just under 30 million. In addition, France is by far the most popular country chosen by UK residents in 1999, followed by Spain and USA, at around 9 and 3 million, respectively. [very good!]

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