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Summer 2012 I had been working in chemistry company when I passed my last university exam at the end of June. All Russian men are bound to compulsory military service. I must go to the army in October for one year. So I decided to spend the next three months (before serving in the army) in adventures. I left my boring work immediately because I had a small salary. I thought my free time needed to be valued more. I fell in love at this period. It was my first love. She’s name was Olga. We were interested in tourism and sport. We used to go often to the river and lived in a camping house. Sometimes we spent time with our friends. Usually, we were transported by bicycle. It is a cheap and healthy kind of transport. We played the guitar, swam in the river and talked. Who knows, one of those conversations may be the most romantic conversation of my life. Olga visited the church to sing in a choir. And I visited a church to listen a beautiful chanting. Almost all our friends were involved in sports tourism. We had been preparing for a long adventure. We had plans to go to the Caucasian mountains in August. We exercised few times a week this summer. Well, you know, a lot of push-ups, pull-ups and daily running. So we did become stronger. There were 7 participants in our team: 4 guys and 3 girls. We were alone in nature and overcoming the obstacles in the path of our trip. There were rocks, сold, heat, snow, discharged air. It took us only 10 days to do more than 100 kilometres. By the end of our trip, we ascended in the Elbrus, the Europe highest mountain. For me, it was a great point of my life. Immediately after the mountain’s adventure, I travelled to the Black Sea with my father and his friends. There were maybe 10 of us and 4 inflatable sailboats. We moved from Feodosia (also called Theodosia) town to Alushta town on the Southern coast of the Crimea. We sailed pass desert landscapes, high castles and fishing vessels. We met with dolphins. You know, we were hoping to catch our dinner and cook it on fire and sleep under the stars. And this dream came true in this expedition. Then I left the boat and went to my friends by bicycle. They lived near Maykop. It is the capital city of the Republic of Adygea in Russia. We travelled there for few days by bicycle and kayak. At the end of summer, I came home. Soon I went to serve in the army, lost my first love. And this is where the story ends, at least for me. I still miss those days.

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Summer 2012

I had been working in a chemistry company when I passed my last university exam at the end of June. All Russian men are bound to compulsory military service. I must go to the army in October for one year, so I decided to spend the next three months (before serving in the army) on adventures. I left my boring work immediately because I had a small salary. I thought my free time needed to be valued more.


I fell in love during this period. It was my first love. Her name was Olga. We were interested in tourism and sports. We often went to the river and we lived in a cabin. Sometimes we spent time with our friends. Usually, we went by bicycle. It is a cheap and healthy means of transportation. We played the guitar, swam in the river and talked. Who knows, one of those conversations may be the most romantic conversation of my life. Olga visited the church to sing in a choir, and I visited the church to listen to beautiful chanting.


Almost all our friends were involved in sports tourism. We had been preparing for a long adventure. We had plans to go to the Caucasian mountains in August. We exercised a few times a week that summer. Well, you know, a lot of push-ups, pull-ups and daily running. So we did become stronger. There were 7 participants in our team: 4 guys and 3 girls. We were alone in nature and overcoming the obstacles in the path of our trip. There were rocks, сold, heat, snow, and winds. It took us only 10 days to do more than 100 kilometers. By the end of our trip, we ascended in the Elbrus, the Europe's highest mountain. For me, it was a great point in my life.


Immediately after the mountain’s adventure, I traveled to the Black Sea with my father and his friends. There were maybe 10 of us and 4 inflatable sailboats. We moved from the town of Feodosia (also called Theodosia) to the town of Alushta  on the Southern coast of the Crimea. We sailed pass desert landscapes, high castles and fishing vessels. We met with dolphins. You know, we were hoping to catch our dinner and cook it on fire and sleep under the stars. And this dream came true during this expedition.


Then I left the boat and went to my friends by bike. They lived near Maykop. It is the capital city of the Republic of Adygea in Russia. We traveled there for a few days by bicycle and kayak.

At the end of summer, I came home. Soon I went to serve in the army, and lost my first love. And this is where the story ends, at least for me. I still miss those days.

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Summer 2012

I had been working in a  chemistry company when I passed my last university exam at the end of June. All Russian men are bound to compulsory military service. That's why, I must go to the army in October for one year, and I decided to spend in the adventures the next three months, when is  before serving in the army. I left my boring work immediately because I had a small salary ,and I thought my free time needed to be valued more.
I fell in love in this period. It was my first love. Her name was Olga. We were interested in tourism and sport, so we used to go often to the river and lived in a camping house. Sometimes we spent time with our friends. Usually, we used to be  transported by bicycle. It is a cheap and healthy kind of transport. We played the guitar, swam in the river and talked. Who knows, one of those conversations may be the most romantic conversation of my life. Olga used to visit the church to sing in a choir. And I used to visit the church to listen a beautiful chanting.
Almost all our friends were involved in sports and tourism. We had been preparing for a long adventure. We had plans to go to the Caucasian mountains in August. This summer, we exercised few times a week by doing push-ups and pull-ups and by running daily, so they made us stronger. There were 7 participants in our team: 4 guys and 3 girls. We were alone in nature and overcoming the obstacles in the path of our trip. There were rocks, сold, heat, snow ,and  the discharged air. It took us only 10 days to do more than 100 kilometers. By the end of our trip, we ascended on the Elbrus, the highest mountain of Europe For me, it was the greatest  moment of my life.
Immediately after the mountain adventure, I travelled to the Black Sea with my father and his friends. There were maybe 10 of us and 4 inflatable sailboats. We moved from Feodosia town, also called Theodosia, to Alushta town on the Southern coast of the Crimea. We sailed and passed desert landscapes, high castles and fishing vessels. We met with dolphins. You know,  we had hoped to catch our dinner and cook it on fire and sleep under the stars. And this dream came true in this expedition. 

Then I left the boat and went to my friends by bicycle. They lived near Maykop. It is the capital city of the Republic of Adygea in Russia. We travelled there for few days by bicycle and boat.
At the end of the summer, I came to home. Soon I went to serve in the army and lost my first love. And this is where the story ends, at least for me. I still miss those days.

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"camping house" means "tent". Special thanks for the advice of name of the town. "discharged air" means air with small pressure. When you are located on the elevation of 5000m above sea level, for example. Your body is needed more oxygen, you want to sleep...
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I also didn't know what "discharged air" was. I corrected it as "winds", but truly don't know quite what you meant there.
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One other note, in English you don't really say "<name> town" unless it's fictional. So "crazy town" or "clown town" is OK, but you wouldn't say "Orlando town" or "Greenville town". Generally you'd just say only the name of the town. If you were worried the reader/listener didn't know it was a town, you'd say "the town of Orlando" or "the town of Greenville". In your passage, Feodosia and Alushta are OK as they are without the town clarification. Even though I've never heard of either, it's clear from the context that both are towns.

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