30mins of essay, please give me some advice from a native perspective of academic writing, thanks Personally, I would prefer to favor studying hard in school, instead of another way around. Although

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30mins of essay, please give me some advice from a native perspective of academic writing, thanks Personally, I would prefer to favor studying hard in school, instead of another way around. Although, having the ability to build a strong interpersonal relationship is essential to the progressing of our career. In certain cases, it might even pave the way towards the ultimate career success. However, how can we achieve anything without the effort of hard-working, especially, nowadays all industries are extensively specialized and require specific skill sets to overcome daily tasks. Taking the construction industry as an example, the majority of architects are required to receive at least 10 years of professional training in order to obtain a recognised qualification to practice as an expert in the industry. This is impossible to achieve without over a decade of hard working in academic. As a comprehensive understanding of the construction policies is essential to the line of work. Perhaps, in a sense that a charming character and excellent interpersonal relationship skills do help individuals in terms of further career advancement. However, it certainly would not able to replace the fundamentals, such as those professional knowledge can only obtain from the long-years of hard-working. Furthermore, a professional attitude of hard working is just as important as good interpersonal skills. There is no easy task in our everyday professional practice, regardless which line of the industry we specialized. The professional knowledge can only require from years of training, so do the attitude of hard-working. Sometimes we should even consider this as a kind of professional virtue，a core skill equally as important as the professional knowledge itself. Just looking into the everyday situation of the medical industry, imagining what if all our doctors focus on building a good relationship with co-workers, instead of working extended hours to help their patients, those who truly in need of their medical attention. If this is the case, then, does any of them possess the basic qualities to become an award-winning doctor？It is unimaginable when our world is hunted by diseases, like Ebola, and our doctors are charmed to improve their social skills, instead of hard-working to seek for a possible cure to safeguard the humanity. Overall, the ability to relate well to people is essential in the workforces. However, neither the professional knowledge which can only gain from studying hard in school nor a professional attitude of hard working is replaceable in ……

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Personally I support people who studied hard in school to achieve their professional success, as apposed to success achieved by a charming personality.

Although, having the ability to build strong interpersonal relationships is essential to the advancement of our careers; and in certain cases it might even pave the way to ultimate career success, we can not achieve anything without a solid foundation of education. Especially now a days, when all industries are extensively specialized, and require highly specific skill sets to achieve even the most basic tasks.

Take the construction industry for example, the majority of architects are required to receive at least 10 years of professional training in order to become qualified as an expert in their industry. This is impossible to achieve without dedication to your academic studies. Especially considering that a comprehensive understanding of construction policies and protocol is essential to that line of work. Also having a charming personality and excellent interpersonal skills certainly help in terms of career advancement; However, that definitely would not replace a foundation of hard work and dedication to school.

Furthermore, a good work ethic is just as important, if not more so, than good interpersonal skills. There are no easy tasks in our everyday professions, regardless of which line of work you specialize in. The knowledge necessary can only be obtained from years of hard work and training, just as a good work ethic can only be acquired through years of hard work and training. We should actually consider this a professional requirement, a basic core skill held to just as high of a standard as the professional knowledge itself.

Take a look at the medical industry. Imagine if all the doctors just focused on building good relationships with the staff and patients, instead of working long hard hours to ensure patients in need are well taken care of. If that was the case, would they be able to become award- winning doctors? Absolutely not. When our world is being bombarded by diseases like ebola, would you want your doctors focusing on improving their charm and social skills? Or would you prefer they get to work and focus on finding a cure to safeguard humanity?

Overall, yes, the ability to relate to people is an essential skill in the workplace. However it will never replace the need for core knowledge, good work ethic and dedication to academics. I personally want a well educated, focused and proficient doctor. Even if his bedside manner or relationship with his staff leaves much to be desired.

I am not a native english speaker, but I guess I can help a bit here and there.

The global text is understandable but the logic of the reflexion and the linking words need to be checked a bit more in details.

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30mins of essay, please give me some advice from a native perspective of academic writing, thanks

Personally, I would prefer to favor studying hard in school, instead of another way around.

Although, having the ability to build a strong interpersonal relationship is essential to the progressing of evolution our one's career. In certain cases, it might even pave the way towards the ultimate career success. However, how can we achieve anything without the effort of hard-working, ? Especially nowadays, when all industries are extensively specialized and require specific skill sets to overcome daily tasks.

Taking the construction industry as an example, the majority of architects are required to receive at least 10 years of professional training in order to obtain a recognised qualification and to practice as an expert in the industry. This is impossible to achieve without over a decade or more of hard working in academic work. As a comprehensive understanding of the construction policies is essential to the line of work. Perhaps, in a sense that a charming character and excellent interpersonal relationship skills do help individuals in terms of further career advancement. However, it certainly would not able to replace the fundamentals, such as those professional knowledge that can only obtain from through the long-years of hard-working.

Furthermore, a professional attitude of hard working is just as important as good interpersonal skills. There is no easy task in our everyday professional practice, regardless which line of the industry we specialized. Professional knowledge can only require be reached after from years of training, so do the attitude of hard-working. Sometimes we should even consider this as a kind of professional virtue，a core skill equally as important as the professional knowledge itself.

Just looking into the everyday situation of the medical industry, imagining what if all our doctors focus on building a good relationship with co-workers, instead of working extended hours to help their patients, those who truly in need of their medical attention. If this is the case, then, does any of them possess the basic qualities to become an award-winning doctor？It is unimaginable when our world is haunted hunted by diseases, like Ebola, and our doctors are charmed would rather improve their social skills, instead of hard-working to seek for a possible cure to safeguard the humanity ? This would be outrageous.

Overall, the ability to relate well to people is essential in the workforces. However, neither the professional knowledge which can only gain from studying hard in school nor a professional attitude of hard working is replaceable in ……

@ Ian de Vries Thank you for your comment. I agree with your opinion. Perhaps, I can give myself another 30mins to try to debate this matter with myself from an opposite angle.

I saw nothing worth correcting. Your theme was easy to follow and in general I agreed except. If knowledge cannot be shared then unless you work alone, interact with no one, then it is wasted. I might be performing a task and you know of a more efficient, easier and quicker way to do it. You come up to me and say "hey dummy, you doing it wrong". whatever you say after this I will not hear because I will want to deck you. Knowing how to communicate is not just about language. It is about working together and respecting each other's differences and finding a way to coexist. If I was to pretend to be an architect, since I am not qualified it would be chaos. I would not know terminology, would not understand plans, would not be able to make informed decisions regarding stresses, materials, anything. You are right that without the background knowledge the work cannot be performed, but without the interpersonal skills to work with others, and communicate with others, misunderstandings will arise and delays.

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