Part 2, please read part 1 first.

They aren't less important than humans are. They are beautiful and they deserve to live a marvelous life.

1/ This is where you would use the word "issue". "Argument" doesn't apply here. An argument would be a point of view to be discussed, such as "Zoos should not keep animals in enclosures". However you aren't saying that directly; you are instead identifying what you see as an issue. (Although in reality many modern zoos have prevented animal extinctions through breeding programs, with subsequent releases into the wild..) 2/ You are talking about zoos in general, not a specific set of zoos, so you would not use "the" here. 3/ A "long year" is poetic, not literal, and does not mean the same thing as "many years" which is what you are saying here. A "long year" suggests a year that has been difficult for a person to live through because of misfortunes. It seems long to the person, but is in fact still 365.25 days long.

They really don't help, conversely, they make the situation worse.

To sum up there are strong arguments on this theme.

"Are" is used with plural words, so you need to say arguments here. (Aside from which, you have identified more than one argument above, so it would have to be plural anyway.)

So I believe that we should do something, we have to respect them animals and forbid hunting. I also think that it is really important to begin using ecological things ecologically sustainable products.

1/ Language purists would suggest that you should not begin a sentence with a conjunction like "so". It is so common these days that hardly anyone notices, but it may be an issue if you are taking a formal test. You can get rid of the "so" and just say "I believe..." 2/ The use of "animals" is clearer here. 3/ "ecological things" is a little too vague here.

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1/ "Animals" is plural but "range" is singular. It is the range that is endangered. 2/ The verb is "to save"; the infinitive form.

However a lot of people don't do anything for to improve this situation, thinking about other problems which surround their lives. The the question is: is it right to help animals?

That's the same issue; you need the infinitive form (like migliorare) here.

Firstly, it is clear that animals are mostly disappearing because of hunting. For this reason, without a doubt elephants are killed every day for the commerce of avory ivory or and bears for the production of furs.

It's not an either / or situation; both of these things are happening. Therefore you need to use "and", not "or". Also I would be wary of saying "mostly" here, because habitat destruction is a far greater threat than hunting is. "Mostly" would seem to imply that it's the major reason, rather than a contributing one. I would consider changing that to "many animals are disappearing..."

Furthermore a large number of polar bears have lost their lives on account of rising sea levels, as well as penguins. This is also true of penguins.

By saying "as well as" you seemed to be indicating that "penguins" were an additional reason that polar bears have lost their lives.

The main reason of for protecting these animals is that they live on Earth just as humans do, so there are no issues for reasons to kill them or for to not respect them.

1/ You can have a reason for {something}, or you can have a reason to do {something}, but you would never have a reason of. 2/ You can't say "they live on earth as human" because that suggests that they are living a human lifestyle. (Living in houses, driving cars, etc.) Instead you mean that they live on Earth, just as humans live on Earth. 3/ You are talking about a motivation to kill them; that is, a "reason". The killing of the animals is itself an "issue", but it's not a reason. 4/ The verb is "to kill", not "for kill". You seem to have a bit of a blind spot when it comes to the infinitive form of verbs; I would recommend revising your textbooks on that. I'm out of characters; to be continued.

Overall you did a great job. I'm not a good editor, but here are the changes that I would make. Cheers!

Nowadays many people claim that a wide range of animals are endangered and that we should do something as soon as possible for to save them. However a lot of people don't do anything for to improve this situation, perhaps because they are thinking about other problems in their which surround their lives. The the question is: is it right to help animals?