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I need a correction (: please Keeping animals in zoos Keeping animals in zoos has become a prickly issue since it is a hotly-debated topic which often divides opinions. Is the aim of it positive or is it just entertainment for adults and children? Firstly, an important point worth considering is that in recent years the number of animal lovers has increased and many of them present themselves as real "warriors" fighting for animal rights. They consider keeping animals in zoos cruel not only because animals are obliged to live far away from their natural environment but also because a large number of these animals have showed significant changes in their behaviour: at times they look as though they are "sad", while whole families pass by their cages. Children often look at "that huge polar bear" or "that cute raccoon" with a grin on their faces, being unaware of how depressing living behind metal bars is. Notwithstanding, there are serious reasons why they are kept there. Take, by way of example, pandas. It is well-known that they are an endangered species and their captivity is the only way to prevent them from dying out. In conclusion, all things considered, we can deduce that captivity may be just if the only purpose is to keep animals safe from hunters or extinction.But if it is seen as entertainment, we all should reshape the concept of "entertainment".

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Keeping animals in zoos Keeping animals in zoos has become a prickly issue since it is a hotly-debated topic which often divides opinions. Is the aim of it positive or is it just entertainment for adults and children? Firstly, an important point worth considering is that in recent years the number of animal lovers has increased and many of them present themselves as real "warriors" fighting for animal rights. They consider keeping animals in zoos cruel not only because animals are obliged to live far away from their natural environment but also because a large number of these animals have shown significant changes in their behaviour: at times they look as though they are "sad", while whole families pass by their cages. Children often look at "that huge polar bear" or "that cute raccoon" with a grin on their faces, being unaware of how depressing living behind metal bars is. Notwithstanding, there are serious reasons why they are kept there. Take, by way of example, pandas. It is well-known that they are an endangered species and their captivity is the only way to prevent them from dying out. In conclusion, all things considered, we can deduce that captivity may be just if the only purpose is to keep animals safe from hunters or extinction.But if it is seen as entertainment, we all should reshape the concept of "entertainment".

Excellent writing. I'm not sure I would use 'reshape' here. It's grammatically correct, but doesn't feel quite right to me. Maybe 're-examine' would be better.

The grammar police will tell you not to use 'But' at the start of a sentence like this, but we all do it....

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