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EssayNowadays many people claim that schools should begin using computers and software, which are a really usuful useful systems, fast and easy to use; however there is a strong argument that they schools should spend money on textbooks, which are normally using have been used every day for many years. So whics which is the best choise choice to make?
Firstly, it is clear that the main advantage of spending money on computers is student's attitude. Indeed, technology is considered a form of fun by young people and, for this reason, they could be more interested in some subjects seeing shown on a screen rather than on in books. Furthermore, it could be is possible to see not only images but also videos, which are less boring.
On the other hand, some parents insist on spending money on textbooks, saying that they have been used in for all this these years, written by famous authors and, without a doubt, they always works, work as form of learning.
Another argument is that computers are more expensive than textbooks. If someone sought bergains bargains for buiyng buying books, he would find it.
To sum up, there are strong arguments on boths both sides, but i I believe that we should look forwards and not backwards, spending less money on preserving the past and more on developing our future, so we should buy computers.
Overall, this is a good essay! The main mistakes were in spelling. Some others I noticed:
-Remember the difference between this and these. While both refer to a particular thing (such as a specific year or specific years), this is used for singular things (year) and these is used for plural things (years).
-Think about which tense works best for the idea you're trying to write. In the correction I made in the first paragraph, it makes more sense to use the present perfect than a continuous tense, because the sentence describes a situation that began in the past and is still ongoing.
-Remember to make it clear who the pronouns refer to. In the phrase 'they should spend money on textbooks,' it is unclear if 'they' refers to the schools or to many people, both of which were mentioned in the first part of the sentence. In that case, use 'the schools' to clarify.
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