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Nowadays more people claim that spending money on exploring space could be a big opportunity for the future of humanity, however, there is strong argument that we should use the same money on improving the life on Earth.
Firstly, is clear that the main advantage of exploring space is the chance of find a new planet, which could save humanity after the end of the world. Indeed, for many years, global warming damages the Earth, for example with rising sea levels as well as the climate change. Therefore the human being could live, in the future, on a planet which is better than the Earth, without pollution and many other problems.
On the other hand, all this money could be spent in order to solve the Earth's problem. Childrens of Africa are kept in a malnutrition state, which coulb kill them easily. For this reason, if this amount of money was used to help these kids, the World would be best.
To sum up, there are strong arguments on both sides, but, i believe that find a new planet is the best option.
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Nowadays, more many people claim that spending money on exploring space could be a big opportunity for the future of humanity; however, there is a strong argument that we should use the same money on improving the life on Earth.Firstly, it is clear that the main advantage of exploring space is the chance of to find a new planet, which could save humanity after the end of the this world. Indeed, for many years, global warming has damaged the Earth, for example with rising sea levels as well as the climate change. Therefore the human being humans could live, in the future, on a planet which is better than the Earth, without pollution and many other problems.
On the other hand, all this money could be spent in order to solve the Earth's problems. Childrens of in Africa are kept in a malnutrition state, which could kill them easily. For this reason, if this amount of money was used to help these kids, the World would be best.
To sum up, there are strong arguments on both sides, but, I believe that finding a new planet is the best option.
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Overall, very well-written and only a few mistakes. It comes across as very fluent.
One advanced topic: in the first sentence, I added a semi-colon to separate the first part of the sentence from the second part. If you have a sentence that combines two thoughts (especially when you use 'however'), it's best to use a semi-colon ( ; ) to separate the two parts.
Well done!
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