Search from various English teachers...
Spain flagRubén
Essay: Being a musician or an actor Nowadays, young people sometimes dreams of being a musician or an actor because they think that everything is good, but the problem is that they are not aware of the disadvantages that there are. As advantages we have found many interesting ones but the most important is to do the job that people love and make people enjoy. It is important to pursue a dream up to getting it as long as it is possible. Doing what you really enjoy helps people to feel themselves happy and self-confident. In the case of artists, they will be able to become well-known if they do their jobs so well since they travel all over the world in order to show their work and experience to everyone. In addition, being a famous person helps you to get access to exclusive places and work along with the most important people of that field. On the other hand, being a famous person brings some unknown disadvantages as well. First, they loose their privacy, cannot see their families due the lack of free time, are away for a long time too in a business trip, for example. Regarding the job of an artist, they sometimes work as such but they don't earn enough money to buy the basic things such as diary food to eat, etc. So they need to get an extra job and then it is even more difficult to share time with the family. To sum up, I recommend to pursue your dream but rate everything, the advantages and disadvantages.

Corrections · 2

0

Essay: Being a musician or an actor

Nowadays, young people sometimes dreams of being a musician or an actor because they think that everything is good, but the problem is that they are not aware of the disadvantages that there are.

As The advantages we have found many  are interesting ones, but the most important is to do the job that people love and make people enjoy happy. It is important to pursue a dream up to getting it as long as it is possible (I am a little confused here. I think what you mean to say is "It is important to pursue a dream and having it last as long as possible"). Doing what you really enjoy helps people to feel themselves happy and self-confident. In the case of artists, they will be able to become well-known if they do their jobs so well since they travel all over the world in order to show their work and allow others to experience it experience to everyone. In addition, being a famous person helps you to get access to exclusive places and work along with the most important people of that field.

On the other hand, being a famous person brings some unknown disadvantages as well. First, they loose their privacy, cannot see their families due to the lack of free time, are away for a long time too in a business trip, for example. Regarding the job of an artist, they sometimes work as such but they don't earn enough money to buy the basic things such as diary food to eat, etc. So they need to get an extra job and then it is even more difficult to share time with the family.

To sum up, I recommend to pursue your dream but rate everything, the advantages and disadvantages.

Your writing is good! There was just a couple of technical errors that can easily be fixed! 


0

Essay: Being a musician or an actor

Nowadays, young people sometimes dream of being a musician or an actor because they think that everything is good, but the problem is that they are not aware of the disadvantages that there are.

On one hand, there are many interesting advantages, but the most important is to do the job that people love and make people enjoy. It is important to pursue a dream up to getting it as long as it is possible. Doing what you really enjoy helps people to feel themselves happy and self-confident. In the case of artists, they will be able to become well-known if they do their jobs so well since they travel all over the world in order to show their work and experience to everyone. In addition, being a famous person helps you to get access to exclusive places and work along with the most important people of that field.

On the other hand, being a famous person brings some unknown disadvantages as well. First, they lose their privacy, cannot see their families due the lack of free time, and are away for a long time on business trips, for example. Regarding the job of an artist, they sometimes work a lot but they don't earn enough money to buy the basic things such as diary food to eat, etc. So they need to get a second job and then it is even more difficult to share time with the family.

To sum up, I recommend to pursue your dream but rate everything, the advantages and disadvantages.

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today