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Enoshima Shrine, One of the most popular spots near Tokyo: Part 1 Enoshima shrine in Enoshima island in Kanakaga prefecture consists of three shrines, Hetsu No Miya, Nakatsu No Miya and Okutsu No Miya. After walking through a busy shopping street, Benzaiten Nakamise Dori street, you can find a red gate standing in front of steep steps up to the first Shinden, a religious house for a Japanese diety. The gate is generally called Torii which literally means a place for birds. You can find that it looks like a perch, yet there are many derivations where its name has come. My friend and I paid respect to the deity by donating some pocket money and praying in a traditional manner, which is bowing twice, clapping your hand twice and then bowing once again. If you want to make this experience memorable, I would like to recommend you to go to the shrine office just next to the Shinden and ask for Goshuin, which is red stamps and calligraphic writings. It is a kind of certificate that you pay respect to the deity.

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Enoshima Shrine, One of the most popular spots near Tokyo: Part 1

Enoshima shrine on Enoshima island in Kanakaga prefecture consists of three shrines: Hetsu No Miya, Nakatsu No Miya and Okutsu No Miya.

After walking through a busy shopping street, Benzaiten Nakamise Dori street, you can find a red gate in front of steep steps that lead up to the first Shinden, a religious house for a Japanese diety. The gate is generally called Torii which literally means a place for birds. You will find that it looks like a perch, yet there are many derivations where the name may have originated from.

My friend and I paid respect to the deity by donating some pocket money and praying in a traditional manner, which is bowing twice, clapping your hand twice and then bowing once again.

If you want to make this experience memorable, I would like to recommend that you go to the shrine office located  next to the Shinden and ask for Goshuin, which are red stamps and calligraphic writings. It is a kind of certificate by which you pay respect to the deity.


Very good writing and also very interesting and kind of you to include an awesome picture my friend!

I suggest you read your article 5 times out loud to your own ears and thus learn the few corrections indicated in yellow covertly.

Teacher Robin (Chiang Mai, Thailand)


Do lots of reading higher level articles and dialogues or monologues with an attentive teacher to smooth out your very good writing and speech no doubt.


Happy Holidays and New Year!


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Enoshima Shrine, One of the most popular spots near Tokyo: Part 1

Enoshima shrine in Enoshima island, Kanakaga prefecture, consists of three shrines, Hetsu No Miya, Nakatsu No Miya and Okutsu No Miya.


After walking through a busy shopping street, Benzaiten Nakamise Dori street, you can find a red gate in front of steep steps up to the first Shinden,. (A Shinden is a religious house for a Japanese diety. )The gate is generally called Torii which literally means a place for birds. You can find that it looks like a perch, yet there are many derivations where its name has come.

My friend and I paid respect to the deity by donating some pocket money and praying in a traditional manner, which is bowing twice, clapping your hand twice, and then bowing once again.

If you want to make this experience memorable, I  recommend you to go to the shrine office, just next to the Shinden, and ask for Goshuin, which is red stamps with(?) calligraphic writings. It is a kind of certificate that enables you pay respect to the deity.

Some minor changes, and at this stage of your writing there are a number of ways to express the same meaning. Going well, great work.

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Enoshima Shrine, one of the most popular spots near Tokyo: Part 1

Enoshima shrine is on Enoshima island in Kanagawa prefecture, and it includes three shrines - Hetsu No Miya, Nakatsu No Miya and Okutsu No Miya.

After walking down a busy shopping street called Benzaiten Nakamise Dori street, you will find a red gate standing in front of steep steps up to the first Shinden, the main hall of the shrine where a Japanese deity is housed. This red gate is generally called a Torii, which literally means a place for birds. Although you will find that it looks like a perch, there are many theories about where its name comes from.

My friend and I paid our respects to the deity by donating some pocket money and praying in a traditional manner, which is done by bowing twice, clapping your hands twice, and then bowing once again.

If you want to make this experience memorable, I would like to recommend that you go to the shrine office just next to the Shinden and ask for a Goshuin, which has red stamps and calligraphic writing. It is a kind of certificate that you have paid your respects to the deity.
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Enoshima Shrine, One of the most popular spots near Tokyo: Part 1

Enoshima Shrine on Enoshima Island in Kanakaga prefecture consists of three shrines: Hetsu No Miya, Nakatsu No Miya and Okutsu No Miya.

After walking through a busy shopping street, Benzaiten Nakamise Dori Street, you can find a red gate standing in front of steep steps up to the first Shinden, a religious house for Japanese diety. The gate is generally called Torii which literally means a place for birds. You can find that it looks like a perch, yet there are many derivations regarding the origin of this expression. 

My friend and I paid respect to the deity by donating some pocket money and praying in a traditional manner, which consists of bowing twice, clapping your hand twice and then bowing once again.

If you want to make this experience memorable, I would like to recommend for you to go to the shrine office just next to the Shinden and ask for Goshuin, which are red stamps and calligraphic writings. It is a kind of certificate that you receive when you pay respect to the deity.

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