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Please, correct this text The nightingale and the rose This story begins from describing suffering of one young man, because will soon be a ball, and he want dancing with a girl, but she said, that if this boy wanted to dance with her, he had to bring her one red rose. His garden hasn’t red rose, only has white rose. And because of it he was very upset. One nightingale observed him, It seems to her, that this love is true, and she decided to help him at any cost. This nightingale was flying and looking for this flower, but there were only white roses. One bush could grow a red rose overnight, but it need blood of the nightingale. This nightingale decided sacrifice for true love. She thought, that she just a bird, and compared with love of two teenagers, her heart, her life is nothing. She read to die for their happiness. The heart of this bird was pierced by a nib of the bush, and she have died. In the morning this boy woke up and noticed a very beautiful and red rose under his window. He caught this flow and rush to that girl. But she said, that another man gifted an adornment to her, and she want dancing with him. This boy with malice throw out that rose on the road, and it was trampled by a horse. This fairy tale is very upset. Because the nightingale sacrifices her life, she was sure, that these teenagers want to be together forever, and she will die for a great deal. But, nobody need her sacrifice. Actually, even that boy didn’t love this girl. Because after her refuse he went to his room and began studying as if happened nothing. If his love was true, he didn’t want to do that. I think despite this fairy tale was written in 19 century, it is very topical in our days. People often don’t value the things, that they received by efforts and sufferings of another people. This short story teach us don’t spread oneself for people, that don’t value us, and be more kind to another people, value what they do for us.

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The Nightingale and the Rose

This story begins by describing the suffering of one young man because he will soon be at a ball and he wants to dance with a girl, but she said that if this boy wanted to dance with her he had to bring her one red rose. His garden hasn’t a single red rose, it only has a white rose. And because of this he was very upset. One nightingale observed him. It seems to her that this love is true, and she decided to help him at any cost. This nightingale was flying and looking for this flower but there were only white roses. One bush could grow a red rose overnight, but it needed the blood of the nightingale. This nightingale decided to sacrifice for true love. She thought that she was just a bird and compared with the love of two teenagers, her heart, her life is nothing. She was ready to die for their happiness. The heart of this bird was pierced by a nib of the bush and she died.
In the morning this boy woke up and noticed a very beautiful red rose under his window. He picked this flower and rushed to that girl. But she said that another man gifted an adornment to her and she went dancing with him. This boy with malice throw out that rose on the road, and it was trampled by a horse.
This fairy tale is very upsetting because the nightingale sacrifices her life, she was sure that these teenagers wanted to be together forever and she will die for such a great deal. But, nobody needed her sacrifice. Actually, that boy didn’t even love this girl because after her refusal he went to his room and began studying as if nothing happened. If his love was true, he wouldn't want to do that.
I think that despite this fairy tale was written in the 19 century, it is very topical in our days. People often don’t value the things that they have received by the efforts and sufferings of other people. This short story teaches us to not extend oneself for people that don’t value us, and to be more kind to other people, value what they do for us.

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