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Should Parents Send Their Kids to Art Class?
Nowadays,in China,more and more parents send their kids to art class, because they think these classes can make contribute to their them gain more ablity(/skills), compared to others.Such as singing class,dancing class,language classes, (and so on).But some people disagree with that. It is in children's narure to play, and the art class may take up much time, which could make children feel bored. What's worse, is that some parents even enforce kids to attend the art class they dislike, which may lead childreninto depression. So they advise parents in leaveing more for kids to play more.In my opinion,I think kids are lively and naughty,parents shouldn't to limit their nature of playing. At the same time,they can guide their kids in finding their interests and then appropriately send the kids to an art class. Only if kids like it ,they can be more happyattending.
You should either use 'in my oppinion' or 'i think'. They mean almost the same thing.
All in all, it was ok! Just practice more, and try writing shorter sentences.
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