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Governments in developing countries should take top priority to people's basic need to improve people's life quality. However, what steps should they take have become a big problem in today's society.
Some believe that advanced technology is essential for citizen's life quality. With the development of science and technology, people could have a convenient life. Online payment can reduce rates of crime; modernized public transport can solve the problem of traffic congestion; advanced medical equipment can save more people's lives, which are all because of new technology.
Others think that offering free education is a more effective way to improve life quality. Education is the foundation of a society, which can demonstrate one country's soft power. Providing free education can increase the opportunity for children to gain knowledge; meanwhile give people motivation to fight for their life goals. Also, people will be more competitive in workplace and it will promote the rate of employment.
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Governments in developing countries should take top priority to assess people's basic needs in order to improve people's life their quality of life. However, what steps should they take took have become a big problem in today's society.
Some believe that advanced technology is essential for a citizen's person's quality of life quality. With the development of science and technology, they believe people could have a convenient life. Online payment can reduce rates of crime, modernized public transport can solve the problem of traffic congestion, and advanced medical equipment can save more people's lives, which are all because of new technology.
Others think that offering free education is a more effective way to improve life quality of life. Education is the foundation of a society, which can demonstrate one a country's soft power. Providing free education can increase the opportunity for children to gain knowledge meanwhile givegiving people motivation to fight for their life goals. Also, people will be more competitive in the workplace workforce and it this will promote the rate of employment.
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Governments in developing countries should take top priority to people's basic need to improve people's life quality (make people's need to improve quality of life their top priority). However, what steps should they take have become a big problem in today's society.
Some believe that advanced technology is essential for citizen's (a citizen's/ citizens') life quality. With the development of science and technology, people could have a convenient life. Online payment can reduce rates of crime; modernized public transport can solve the problem of traffic congestion; advanced medical equipment can save more people's lives, which are all because of new technology (better way: all of which are facilitated by the use of new technology).
Others think that offering free education is a more effective way to improve life quality. Education is the foundation of a society, which can demonstrate one country's soft power. Providing free education can increase the opportunity for children to gain knowledge; meanwhile (it will) give people motivation to fight for their life goals. Also, people will be more competitive in workplace (workplaces) and it will promote the rate of employment.
Some believe that advanced technology is essential for citizen's (a citizen's/ citizens') life quality. With the development of science and technology, people could have a convenient life. Online payment can reduce rates of crime; modernized public transport can solve the problem of traffic congestion; advanced medical equipment can save more people's lives, which are all because of new technology (better way: all of which are facilitated by the use of new technology).
Others think that offering free education is a more effective way to improve life quality. Education is the foundation of a society, which can demonstrate one country's soft power. Providing free education can increase the opportunity for children to gain knowledge; meanwhile (it will) give people motivation to fight for their life goals. Also, people will be more competitive in workplace (workplaces) and it will promote the rate of employment.
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