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A casual note It is often remarked gloomily that we Japanese naively take peace for granted. Such a statement, I believe, is definitely true and one can observe a lot of testaments to it in daily life. For example, the main concern of a majority of news programs this morning was a disorderly charge committed by a sumo wrestler, and the second subject was about petty affairs of celebrities; thereafter several serious news, domestic and international, were treated perfunctorily. You may deem it just an exception, but it is normal in my nation, though the chief topic varies day to day from a meal of ministers to a visit to a hot spring of a governor. My personal feelings toward this state are intricate. On the one hand, I have a sensation similar to irritation, or rather rage, against such insouciance of our fellow countrymen. On the other, I find myself really fortunate to live in this amazingly peaceful country where a woman in her 20s like me can walk about the streets alone at night almost without feeling misgivings about being assaulted and robbed. I did not begin writing this to bring about a definite solution. I wrote this just as a casual note in order to inspect my proficiency at writing in English. So here is the end. Thank you for reading.

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A casual note

It is often remarked gloomily that we Japanese naively take peace for granted. Such a statement, I believe, is definitely true and one can observe a lot of testaments to it in daily life. For example, the main concern of a majority of news programs this morning was a disorderly charge committed by a sumo wrestler, and the second subject was about the petty affairs of celebrities; thereafter several serious news, domestic and international, were treated perfunctorily.
You may deem it just an exception, but it is normal in my nation, though the chief topic varies day to day from a meal of ministers to a visit to a hot spring of a governor.
My personal feelings toward this state are intricate. On the one hand, I have a sensation similar to irritation, or rather rage, against such insouciance of our fellow countrymen. On the other, I find myself really fortunate to live in this amazingly peaceful country where a woman in her 20s, like myself,  can walk about the streets alone at nights almost without feeling any misgivings about being assaulted and robbed.
I did not begin writing this to bring about a definite solution. I wrote this just as a casual note in order to inspect my proficiency at writing in English. So here is the end. Thank you for reading.

Very good! Impressive indeed!

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Yoku Dekimashita! Your writing is excellent with a wonderful mix of generalizations and details from news events to bolster your discerning assertions, which are made with a sweeping range of vocabulary delivered with exceptional clarity and expressive lyricism. I was particularly impressed by the relevance of your comment because you present the obverse reflection of my point of view. Instead of the effect of petty affairs on readers, I thought of how it impacted a Japanese athlete and performing artist who I am a big fan of. They have long been a target stalked by the Japanese press for tabloid articles based on often groundless claims that are none of our business. Despite their great contribution to the athletic and artistic heritage of Japan and the world, the press often gets a kick out of undermining them even as they endured big disadvantages from a system that greatly underestimated their magnanimous and magical talent. In conclusion, I feel this harassment and invasion of famous peoples' private lives appeal to depraved instincts that enhance the desire to disseminate sensationalized and fabricated information. It atrophies the intellectual acumen of a nation, and in the case I cited, attempts to belittle Japan's most highly visible inspirational people who serve as a source of spiritual enlightenment. Suggestions: 1. ;thereafter several serious news, domestic and international stories received perfunctory treatment. 1. from a meal of ministers to a visit by a governor to a gushing hot spring. 2. My personal feelings are ambivalent towards this state of affairs in my nation. 3. assess my English writing proficiency Best points:: Excellent use of assonance which brings a rich rhythm to your evident expressiveness such as assaulted and robbed and there is also a nice spice of consonance in your writing such as gloomily and granted, meal of ministers, and rather rage.
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A casual note

It is often remarked gloomily that we Japanese naively take peace for granted. Such a statement, I believe, is definitely true and one can observe a lot of testaments to it in daily life. For example, the main concern of a majority of news programs this morning was a disorderly charge committed by a sumo wrestler, and the second subject was about petty affairs of celebrities; thereafter several serious news, domestic and international, were treated perfunctorily.

--> It is often said that we Japanese take peace for granted. I feel that there is a certain truth to this statement. For example, the top story of a major news program this morning was merely a disorderly charge against a sumo wrestler. The second story was petty news about the lives of celebrities. The more serious domestic and international news were treated almost as an afterthought.

You may deem it just an exception, but it is normal in my nation, though the chief topic varies day to day from a meal of ministers to a visit to a hot spring of a governor.

--> You may think that this was just an exception, but in fact, it is actually the norm in my country. The main story varies from day-to-day. Today it could be about a meal among the ministers, and tomorrow, it could be a governor's visit to the hot springs.

My personal feelings toward this state are intricate. On the one hand, I have a sensation similar to irritation, or rather rage, against such insouciance of our fellow countrymen. On the other, I find myself really fortunate to live in this amazingly peaceful country where a woman in her 20s like me can walk about the streets alone at night almost without feeling misgivings about being assaulted and robbed.

--> I have mixed feelings about this phenomenon. One the one hand, I am irritated by such displays of insouciance by my fellow countrymen. On the other hand, I find myself to be really fortunate to be living in such a peaceful country, where even young women can walk the streets at night without the fear of being assaulted or robbed.

I did not begin writing this to bring about a definite solution. I wrote this just as a casual note in order to inspect my proficiency at writing in English. So here is the end. Thank you for reading.

--> The purpose of this note is not to argue for a solution. Instead, I wrote it just as a means to practice my writing abilities. Thank you for reading, and I hope you enjoyed reading it.


Wow, this was really nicely written. Your points were well thought out, and your structure has a nice flow to it. For a lay audience, however, I would prioritize simplicity and clarity and avoid using too many complicated words. You clearly have an impressive range of vocabulary though. I even had to search the dictionary for the meanings of a few words. Good luck! :)

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