[My Trip in Sapporo City. 113]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Eight)
The second day of my Hokkaido trip, I visited Lake Toya. It’s a my best favorite lake and a breathtaking of magnificent scenery.
The water was unbelievably so clean. There are some hot springs and an active volcanos around that area where are located southern west from Sapporo for about an hour by bus.
There were a few gropes of Korean tourists visiting by tour buses, who were some families and madams looked enjoy.
The nice spot has several attractions and activities. For example, rental motorcycles, small boats, fast motor boats and clueing ships.
Anyway, the view is awesome. We can enjoy that especially nothing to do.
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[My Trip in Sapporo City. 113]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how wouldyou go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Eight)
The second day of my Hokkaido trip, I visited Lake Toya. It’s a my
The water was unbelievably
There were a few
The nice spot has several attractions and activities. For example, there are rental motorcycles, small boats, fast motor boats and clueing ships.
Anyway, the view is awesome
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[My Trip in Sapporo City. 113]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how wouldyou go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Eight)
The second day of my Hokkaido trip, I visited Lake Toya. It’s a my best favorite lake, and with a breathtaking view of magnificent scenery. (Or, "With magnificent/breathtaking Scenery)
The water was unbelievably so clean. (Or, the water was unbelievably clean) There are some hot springs and an active volcanos around that area where are located southern west from Sapporo for about an hour by bus southwest of Sapporo.
There were a few gropes of Korean tourists visiting by tour buses, who were some families and madams looked enjoy. (This red part makes a little sense but it's clumsy a bit, perhaps "who looked to be enjoying themselves".)
The nice spot has several attractions and activities. For example, ; rental motorcycles, small boats, fast motor boats and clueing ships.
Anyway, the view is awesome. We can enjoy that especially nothing to do.(I don't understand this sentence)
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