Correct my story, please
Hi.
I want to tell you a interesting story. When i was little, we wanted to go to the sea. I was very much looking forward to this trip. I really like the sea, i like to dive, to splash.When we arrived there, i went into the water, i realized that i can't swim. I was suprized when i saw people sitting in the water with books or newspaper in their hands. In the water you only sit neatly, because it's a Dead sea.
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Correct my story, please
Hi.I want to tell you an interesting story. When I was little/a small child, we wanted/had planned to go to the seaside, and I was very much looking forward to this trip. I really like the sea and I like to dive, to splash. When we arrived there and I went into the water, i realized that I can't swim. I was surprised when I saw people sitting in the water with/holding books or newspaper in their hands. In the water you only sit neatly/quietly, because it's the Dead sea.
You can use conjunctions (like, and, but) to make the sentences less simple, more interesting.
'I' is written as capital I
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Correct my story, please
Hi.I want to tell you a interesting story. When I was little, we wanted to go to the sea. I was very much looking forward to this trip. I really like the sea, i like to dive, to splash. When we arrived there, I went into the water but I realized that i couldn't swim. I was surprised when I saw people sitting in the water with books or newspapers in their hands. In the water you only sit neatly because it's a Dead sea.
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