[ My trip in Sapporo City. 107 ]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Two)
After eating a bowl of vegetable noodles, I wanted to have either some beverages or sweets. I explored from the city hall to around nearby the
areas. Coincidently, I found a kinds of food festival on the street. There were about twenty shops on the both sides of the street.
Several shops sold soft ice creams which made by high quality milks and as well-known for milk products.(Such as milks, yogurts and cheeses)
I chose a shop which had a queue. It looked like so yummy and about three U.S dollars. First of all, I had one bite on it really carefully, and it was amazing and lead to me a haven. I highly recommend that you try Hokkaido soft ice creams.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Two)
After eating a bowl of vegetable noodles, I wanted to have either some beverages or sweets. I explored from the city hall toaround nearby the nearby
areas.Coincidently Coincidentally (the meaning you were looking for here is the one for a coincidence, coincidently means it happens at the same time), I found a some kinds of food festival on the street (the right term here would be some instead of a since you are trying to say you don't know the type of festival it is. And also, kind in this situation is supposed to be singular and not plural). There were about twenty shops on the both sides of the street.
Several shops sold soft ice creams which made by with (Right word here is with, since by would mean the milk itself made the ice cream) high quality milks and was well-known for other milk products.(Such as milks, yogurts and cheeses) (In this context those nouns should all be singular and not plural)
I chose a shop which had a queue. It lookedlike so yummy and it cost about three U.S dollars. First of all, I had one bite on (on means on top of something, wrong word hete) of it really carefully, and it was amazing and lead to me to a heaven (I fixed some weird phrasing here, even though it wasn't incorrect but it felt like you were trying to say something else). I highly recommend that you try Hokkaido soft ice creams.
(If you have any questions on my corrections or why some parts were wrong, feel free to message me or reply so that I may explain more clearly)
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Two)
After eating a bowl of vegetable noodles, I wanted to have either some beverages or sweets. I explored from the city hall to
areas.
Several shops sold soft ice cream
I chose a shop which had a queue. It looked
(If you have any questions on my corrections or why some parts were wrong, feel free to message me or reply so that I may explain more clearly)
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